Landscape of the sandman
bursting at the seams
with the lurid nightmare movement
of a thousand twisted dreams.
Abrasive crystal granules
of the horrors in the night
plucked and placed by his hand
into the lines of sleeping plight.
Midnight eyelid gestures
and a silent inward scream
curling at the corners
of a thousand twisted dreams.
Cruel, thirsty Morpheus chasing me
just outside the boundaries of light
as blinded I sink further down
into the lines of sleeping plight.
Author notes
Morpheus-The God of dreams in Greek mythology.
This poem was spawned by two simple words. Go find them.
No connection to Metallica.
A contest entry
- Show me darkest part of your soul (My favourites only) by shadow-of-the-sun.
570 points, ended February 21, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
God help me.
Comments
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Sweet
it sounds really great and the way that you used the words was great
i liked how you used really big words to characterize your meanings
great write :]
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A wonderful piece, dripping darkness. Love the word play, created unique imagery. Best of luck in the contest with it
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Twixt Awake and Deep Sleep
LM, you weave such tapestries of dark and frightening a nature that I am taken to places I dare not go alone. Would you please go with me? ... for I feel you have been and can protect me from what I know not, but what you know so well. Our pact ... you wake me, and I will wake you before all is history for our souls.
Awake ! ... Awake ! ...
at just the moment a skydiver realizes
there will be no grand opening this time
resignation enters the mind
this is my last jump
so, too, in the dreamstate of the lost
the descent is swift and complete
masterminded by Morpheus
i will die tonight
poet43
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I'll go with you anywhere, anytime. Only tell me what you wish to see.
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the comment.
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lol, i knew who this was without even looking at the picture whenever i read your work i always get swept up in your imagery as if im right there with you. and you have such a command over your rhyming ability which always leaves me envious. but then again anything i read of your work leaves me feeling envious of your command over your imagination and vocabulary. the poem itself is very dark and makes me feel uneasy and anxious about sleeping. lol, i like that. thank you very much for entering and good luck missy xxx
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This is one of those rare poems, like something from Dr Seuss or Shel Silverstein) stay with me on this... that I can read over and over and over again.
I am besides myself with the tickle of creativity and genius you possess and let shine through your poetic devices.
I've never posted a contest on here, but if I did, regardless of what it was for... I'd reward you the gold even if you didn't enter, and when all the people come calling to me complaining of my decision, I'd send them this way and I'd never hear about it again.
I'd read this to my children (if I had them) at bedtime (if I didn't think it'd give them nightmares.)
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I pity your children. The emotions behind this poem are all nightmares, every single one of them, in their own rite. Your comment makes me blush, though.
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WHOA!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this was intense
Wonderfully done. I loved this
Abrasive crystal granules
of the horrors in the night
plucked and placed by his hand
into the lines of sleeping plight........
Brilliant
Delila
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Amazing
I love the way it all comes together and flows, it had a really good rythym to it, i love it.
good job sweetheart
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"Cruel, thirsty Morpheus chasing me
just outside the boundaries of light..."
This is wonderful dear poetess! Right up there with your very best. Excellent!
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Funny thing, this was inspired by only two words and took maybe ten minutes to write. Thank you for your comment.
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