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So wrong .. ( Song ) ©

Verse 1:


I have tried to be alone,
all completely by my own,
and I have never felt so wrong,
yeah I never felt so wrong ..

I have tried to act out of care,
all the same out everywhere,
having fun, then hitting home,
till you taught me I was wrong ..


Chorus :

Now I almost feel so scared,
while you're always right out there,
waiting for me with a smile,
makes me wonder all the while ..


Verse 2:


All my life I ran away,
I had nothing more to say,
then you came and shined on me,
made me see through all those days ..

when you often talk so sweet,
you just sweep me off my feet,
all that love inside your eyes,
makes me need no more defeats ..


Chorus:

Now I almost feel so scared,
while you're always right out there,
waiting for me with a smile,
makes me wonder all the while ..

How I never thought of you,
how I acted such a fool,
how I lived alone so long,
guess I've always been so wrong ..



So wrong, so wrong ..
so wrong ..

Author notes

My first song people..
hope you all enjoy it

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Comments

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  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    February 19, 2008

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    well done with the prompt..

    This is unique and refreshing.

    I love the way you have written your song and I am singing it to myself. I'll have a chord pattern in a moment.

    Lots of feeling in these words.


    • EyeRaven
      February 19, 2008
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      hehe thanks

      I can give you the chord pattern if you like

      You play guitar ?

  • vampire of thought
    February 9, 2008

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    Awww....*tears*

    RD this is so sad, and so loving and sweet and...I just want to give you a big hug!

    *wishes she could write like this*

    ~VoT


  • Wandika gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    There is hope

    Sings as if things are looking up for you my friend.

    Wish I could hear the tune but the flow and rhythm is well done. The music can only add to your words a tad.

    Jim


    • EyeRaven
      February 10, 2008
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      Oh

      Thanks dear friend, been a while how's it all going ?
      I might be able to record it in the near future, if so, you'll be among the first to know it.

  • rhondasail
    February 8, 2008

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    First of many I am sure...Love it!...I can still hear it in my head. "how I lived alone so long, guess I've always been so wrong..."...great refrain...I'm proud of you, RamiSon!. ...RhondaMom


    • EyeRaven
      February 10, 2008
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      hehe..

      Ok..so now you know the words..

      If I record this, I'll send it to you Rhondamom.

  • Frodofan silver member
    February 8, 2008
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    Oh I do enjoy it! This is very different for you, but wonderful that way! I wish someone would write something like this for me. It's a real epiphany piece. I'd love to hear it to music.

    I saw you on earlier and was hoping to find something by you when I got back on.


    • EyeRaven
      February 10, 2008
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      There you go then


      I could write something for you if you'd let me

  • confusionismylife
    February 8, 2008
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    wow ok this is a good poem i liked it... or song lol

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