If I glance away
Towards the carpet
It is only because
The monitor haunts
Seventeen days brushed by
In those mountains
Rigidly compressed
You gave to me my wants.
Remember fixing our temples
Against the elements?
To set off more colors
Injecting Northern Lights.
And scrubbing up soft sticks
To shim the fire?
I bet if you lived,
We would've been alright
Shame that I snapped the photo
Three years later
It just issues lies
Wrong date, and such
Wishing I pressed buttons
Back when you were climbing
And captured you where
You breathed and touched
Damn the winter
Soft polyurethane sole
You fell without fear
Like we fell into sheets
So here I write
And sometimes I sit still
Waiting for screen-saver
To bring us back to meet.
Author notes
a wintry landscape
In a list
A contest entry
- Whats On Your Desk Top? by LadyDementia.
850 points, ended February 23, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great job bro,
"Damn the winter
Soft polyurethane sole
You fell without fear
Like we fell into sheets"
Love that stanza.
Great job.
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That was really mesmerizing!
Fantastic job with the prompt! Really mesmerizing poem.
I bet we all read it twice to drink in all the imagery!
well done poetess, well done!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle.
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This is nice
Indeed the scrensaver for memories to hold forever
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Um I kinda like this, it's good and sounds very deep and diffrent. That's a good thing but I am little confused about what it really means. . .
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Beautiful
Oh this is so beautiful and sad. The imagery is amazing, and I really love the flow of the whole poem. Good luck in the contest!
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I agree, it is very nicely put, rich with imagery. Thank you for entering and very best of luck to you
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I think this is very good....not at all something I would have thought of for this contest. But I like the depth to this and what you are saying and it is well worded, has good emotion and reads nicely.
thank you for your entry.
best wishes
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