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god save the screen

If I glance away
Towards the carpet
It is only because
The monitor haunts

Seventeen days brushed by
In those mountains
Rigidly compressed
You gave to me my wants.

Remember fixing our temples
Against the elements?
To set off more colors
Injecting Northern Lights.

And scrubbing up soft sticks
To shim the fire?
I bet if you lived,
We would've been alright

Shame that I snapped the photo
Three years later
It just issues lies
Wrong date, and such

Wishing I pressed buttons
Back when you were climbing
And captured you where
You breathed and touched

Damn the winter
Soft polyurethane sole
You fell without fear
Like we fell into sheets

So here I write
And sometimes I sit still
Waiting for screen-saver
To bring us back to meet.


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  • bones7
    March 26, 2008

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    Great job bro,
    "Damn the winter
    Soft polyurethane sole
    You fell without fear
    Like we fell into sheets"
    Love that stanza.
    Great job.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    That was really mesmerizing!

    Fantastic job with the prompt! Really mesmerizing poem.
    I bet we all read it twice to drink in all the imagery!
    well done poetess, well done!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen/Seattle.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    March 9, 2008
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    This is nice

    Indeed the scrensaver for memories to hold forever


  • Flight of Dragons
    February 23, 2008

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    Um I kinda like this, it's good and sounds very deep and diffrent. That's a good thing but I am little confused about what it really means. . .


  • a-face-in-the-crowd
    February 9, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Oh this is so beautiful and sad. The imagery is amazing, and I really love the flow of the whole poem. Good luck in the contest!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    I agree, it is very nicely put, rich with imagery. Thank you for entering and very best of luck to you


  • aboomer silver member
    February 8, 2008

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    I think this is very good....not at all something I would have thought of for this contest. But I like the depth to this and what you are saying and it is well worded, has good emotion and reads nicely.
    thank you for your entry.
    best wishes

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