Crisp air chills my ever changing skin
Breezes tighten my over-sized pores
Kicking a can made of rusted tin
Frantically searching the floors.
Smooth clouds race above my morphed head
Yet cars pass by like sloths
Gather the light, no, let it spread
My spine tingles like fluttering moths.
People are sleeping yet I never tire
Surreal thoughts pierce through my brain
Look up at the sky! It's on fire!
Quick! sqeeze my hand for rain.
C'mon let's go for a walk! I say.
It's quite nice out side I believe
Hurry up lets go tonight, TODAY!
Let's walk out the door. C'MON LET'S LEAVE!
These trees have fingers, they're waving to us
The sky is dripping with love.
Look at the grass, no watch that bus!
Shheesh I can't even look above.
C'mon lets go! Lets walk to the woods!
Alright whatever I'm fine right here
I'm getting cold lets put up our hoods
Damn I can see everything C L E A R.
I can't feel my hands they're spheres of color
Let's go, let's go, Come ON lets GO!
What's that, the moon? It looks a bit d u l l e r...
But the world look at it, watch it flow!
Patterns emerge they're here they never leave
Everything's bright, it's SO fucking bright,
C'mon what else do you have up your sleeve
Oh shit let's go, we might miss our flight!
I need to gather my thoughts, I can't!
Let's change the scenery please
I'm bored of this, I need to rant!
Ugh get off me you fucking fleas!
Oh shit.
I can't
SSSSSPPPPEEEEEEAK K K
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Think think think
I just HiT my
pppe e e aaakkkkk k k
These colors are (colors are) changing
And (changing and) I cannot m m move move move.
MymymymYMY m m mIND is rage-ragg-rarr-gae...RAGING
youyouuyou stististill hereee? YOU m m must appppproovvvvee.
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Hello again.
Stop FUCKING SAYING THAT!!!
What the-whathe-whAT?
Hear the mus i c
It'ssssss itsits
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Wow. So, what should we do now? I ask
I've lost any motivation and ambition
I've just took off this smiling mask
I'm completely lost after that intermission
Let's go back inside it's starting to rain
And my skull feels like it's scambled my brain.
All the pieces are falling back together
The cows are now beef, and no longer leather
I've melded with the world and came back in a day.
This is how I felt, just last Thursday.
A contest entry
- Check it out! (yes another contest....) by PonyPride.
1050 points, ended March 24, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Like A Pill by GypsyEyes.
375 points, ended March 12, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Last Thursday
Comments
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WOW this just really got to me in a good way! great job! thank you for entering
and best of luck to you!
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rhyme: 19/20 good and well done
flow: 20/20 The flow was excellent, very smooth
style: 20/20 consistant and unique excellent
m/s: 20/20 good, often used in consistantcy with style
c/o/i: 20/20 perfect -
Wow!!
That's all I can say is "WOW"!!!

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i have to admit, when i scrolled down to see how long your poem was i didnt want to read it. but now i'm glad i did, cause that was an amazing style of writing. i would never use swear words in my poetry, but it is a way of expressing yourself and i respect that. the swear words also put a "here and now" spin to it. the poem isnt in a Shakespearian style, it's a new form. really brilliant poem, and i would rant more on it if i had the time, but alas, life moves on. thanks for entering my contest
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