Your love alone can guide me through the night
I want to spend a lifetime in your eyes
And all of this has come as great surprise
My life had simply been a compromise
Now the way I feel is much more right
No man alive has seen a sweeter sight
The loving that I see within your face
You fill for me that very special case
You give me ways to see beyond the light
I know that I have lost me in this fight
I'll never be the man I was before
You are the lady that I must adore
No-one will ever doubt me on that score
I never want to have the least respite
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I never want to have the least respite
No-one will ever doubt me on that score
You are the lady that I must adore
I'll never be the man I was before
I know that I have lost me in this fight
You give me ways to see beyond the light
You fill for me that very special case
The loving that I see within your face
No man alive has seen a sweeter sight
Now the way I feel is much more right
My life had simply been a compromise
And all of this has come as great surprise
I want to spend a lifetime in your eyes
Your love alone can guide me through the night
Author notes
It's a sonnet, that is it is in approximately iambic pentameter rhymed abbba acca addda. Oh yes and you can read it either way up.
In a list
A contest entry
- NOT a pic inspired one (shock, horror!) by Tattboyspet.
300 points, ended February 22, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
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really like this hehe UNIQUE
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Now this is wonderful Jeff. Very clever turnaround too. Love is a two way street always has been always will be. Big clappies much deserved.
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I really like this.When life gives you a second chance and yes, you do realise that before life was a compromise.To find someone you love and respect and it is returned is the most wonderful gift that life can offer and you put it in a nut shell.Well done on winning Gold.Very well deserved, Ros
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i like it!
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Well penned. I loved this piece. Ofcourse I see nothing wrong here but then again, I am a sideline poet.
Love ya,
Passions
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Your words reflect a sweet surrender and what a beautifully constructed work, if it was a song you could play it backwards and it would still be amazing!
Masterful writing!
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This is great! Imagery, rhyme and meter. If you'd like tho know what you have composed; it's called a line-by-line palindrome. Impressive!
Love,
Amera♥
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I think it might be better in ababa acca adada. It really needs a bit more thought than I gave this one so there is more thread through it, I think with thought it could read as properly threaded both ways.
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it is very good. it could almost be used for a song. but it is very good and deserves much applause.
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As the first entry into the competition you have set the bar pretty high.
Well done!
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nicely done
I cannot comment of the sonnet form as it has never been one of my favourites, but suffice to say that your words flowed well and yes, it DOES make sense both ways 
thank you for your entry
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