I was alone when my family abandoned me
my feelings imploded for none to see
when my mother became sick and died
because of deceit and malignant betrayal
it was a never-ending battlefield
that I alone was knighted and called to
Again, my feeling turned into solitude
society continued to salt my wounds
growing up in sadness and alienation
on societies fringes, in isolation
treated with cruelty and deprivation
One can still love their country
their family, church and state
even though they have caused hurt
and made irreparable, mistakes
trapped in a cycle of victimization
a circle of confusion and madness
enmeshed in a tide of ebb and flow
on the bigger picture, grander scale
when people see and feel this happen
they ask, "Where is justice and God
Is there purpose under any heaven?"
I became the outsider looking in
Seeing what others cannot see
I seek the Divine that is within
This became my only safe haven
I tried to show my friends and others
who would look and listen the same
and warn them of these waxes and wanes
the time has come for the world to know
before we cannot turn back and it is late
the sentiments of the heart to show
or we will be faced with a crueler fate
and have to face a worse, uglier foe
for the kingdom within will no longer wait!
A contest entry
- ~Abuse~And it's Effects~----I Hate the Games but Love the Player--- by Clinging-to-Life.
700 points, ended February 26, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A powerful write and I can relate to much of this. "Again, my feeling turned into solitude
society continued to salt my wounds
growing up in sadness and alienation
on societies fringes, in isolation
treated with cruelty and deprivation" This, I can especially relate to, and you wrote it beautifully. Nice job...Patty
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Wow...Powerful!
I could totally identify! As I was reading your words I felt as if I were reliving my life in part. With a few changes here & there I could see myself singing it as the meter has a wonderful flow! Great Job! Hope you do well.
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i noticed you didnt put what i asked in your authors notes. please do so
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You were right, I did like it better when you re wrote it. the big words you used was hard because i didnt understand some of them, but, over all, i like this poem and i can sense the intensity. thank you for rewriting and editing
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I am glad that you like it better now. Thank you for reading it again.
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Interesting
This is a very interesting poem...I liked your use of words, but not sure that capitalization did this write justice. I think it would have been better if you did not use capitlaization throught out the whole piece. I also dont sense alot of emotion...a good write over all though. thank you for entering. -
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I re-wrote the poem, "Alone" for your contest. I made a few changes. You may like it better now.
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