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Friday at 5 o'clock

Water pulling me
  down shore
Upshore! I slap those waves


Horses high,
  kick eachother and
Fall down me - only white water


This big puddle
  sits in the lap
Of mountains, this summer


Bloated rainclouds,
  ready to piss down
Drive it all into the sea
                  Useless!

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..from a few minutes resting on my board in Byron

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