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my shining star

I’ve been replaying

every moment I spent
in your smile-

cracking jokes that
meant to say much
more

than just punch lines.

[I just love the way
you laugh ...]


I’ve memorized
the way you walk

& the way you smile

[reading you like
a sweet bestseller]


wishing on a moon
that you’d be my star

in this lonely dark

[just you & me.]


I’m so glad that
some wishes do

come true, after all.

Author notes

corny title, I know- but hey love is corny lol XD

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  • transit
    June 4, 2008

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    wow!

    I love the way you put your feelings into a poem but somehow, it does not sound forced or even in- depth. It remains sweet and beautiful. just perfect.

    I was thinking of someone at first then I began to think of ghost whisperer. They are just perfect together aren't they?

    "[reading you like
    a sweet bestseller]


    wishing on a moon
    that you’d be my star"

    these line are so amazing and I believe deep inside, you would have someone exactly like this. you will. The ending was just perfect. too many perfects but they are! The author's notes was true. love is corny and well, the title was really good.

    loveees,
    transit~


  • Beauty Of Silence
    February 9, 2008

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    wow!

    i love this... except for your authors notes... that kinda scared me... but heck! your tittle was catchy man... it was nice!

    And your poem was amazing... awesome! wonderful! great... weeeheee... brilliant! It's like in the middle of romantic and sweet! lovely matey! keep writing such poem... coz i can relate!

    wishing on a moon
    that you’d be my star

    i thought people wished upon a shooting star... aww... its okay... you're just creative i guess!


  • Forgot2Breathe
    February 8, 2008

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    I love this, the title isnt corny at all you did a great job!!!!!!!

    wishing on a moon
    that you’d be my star

    in this lonely dark

    [just you & me.]

  • xTomorrowx
    February 8, 2008

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    Awww sweetie it's beautiful, and love is corny but this definitely is not, it's so sweet and beautiful...
    I love "wishing on a moon that you'd be my star" my absolute favourite line
    Beautiful!
    Awesome job sweetie and good luck in the contest!