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A reminder

I see them touch

and
  I suddenly remember
                you ~


the dust lifts

                gently...


A contest entry

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  • Naridill
    February 9, 2008

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    Last two lines are a little, not sure, left out? I feel they lose the flow a little there but still the separate phrasing are enticing.

    Thanks for entering,


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    awwwww this is such a beautiful piece and your words hold a soothing and gentle touch. well done and best of luck


  • arafura gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    This is very good! You certainly know how to tell a story in a very few words.... Good luck in the contest!