This is my mask dark and gruesome.
Life made me this way, it is to blame.
World turned it's back on me when I needed it most.
Left me in this dark and lonely place.
Crying out from the soul for help...
Author notes
Looked at her face and all I saw was pain...
In a list
A contest entry
- Yes Another QUICKIE!!! by Nighttime angel.
525 points, ended February 8, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Well, what do you think?
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Well deserved trophy hun! I see the pain in the picture too.. and in your well written words!
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Very well written, your first two lines says it all. You did a good job on this poem, embodied pain, without mentioned the word "pain".Great job! your bro
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woaw
the picture is so very intense and it indeed did show pain. I really felt this poem and the way you made it seem like the world was against her was very convincing and fit the picture. Congrats on the silver!
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Yes it does show a lot of pain.
There is so much that you can
draw from this picture. Great
work with it and good luck to you!
Jeremy0826 -
wonderful write, I am sure many could relate to this at one point in there life.
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I can definitely feel your pain and anguish in here
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Great Write Good luck
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this is one amazing and powerful poem. I am sure that there has been many people who have been where she is. too many people fall through the cracks every day in this world and its really sad. you did a great job with this prompt.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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