I miss the way you'd kiss my cheek
and hold me safe and tight
forever seems too long to wait
for you to make life right
I promised you I'd wait
for you to save my heart
so we could be together
and never be apart
I've given up all hope
as the years have passed me by
and I've begun to believe
that your promised was a lie
I'm not afraid anymore
you helped me face my fears
you made my life worth living
and wiped away my tears
But still my soul is longing
for you to melt my heart of stone
that forever has been frozen
since you left me all alone
I still don't understand
why you promised me you'd stay
why you gave me cause to hope
then took it all away
But I won't break my promise
and even if I do
I never will forget
why I'm waiting here for you.
Author notes
1] How does this certain part of a song inspire you?
"There is love burning to find you;; will you wait for me?"
I don't know if it really relates to this option but its what a came up with when I read it.
A contest entry
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Comments
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brilliant...
I really like the rhyme and rythme in this. It flows well and is so easily read. It shows a good understanding of how a poem should be written in this fashion, well done indeed.
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But I won't break my promise
and even if I do
I never will forget
why I'm waiting here for you.
your words are coming from the soul of yours ..so deep and so appealing as well..well done....
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The flow was excellent, the only one place where it slowed down a little was "that your promised was a lie," it should be "that your promise was a lie." But that's the only place were it seemed to stop. Very nice, keep it up!
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