If only I could hold you forever,
till the end of time, embrace our love.
But yet I know this could never be,
for eternity isn't known.
It seems like a curse,
to know that we cannot be for all of time.
I wonder, does it all just end like it never was?
Or is there more to only what we see?
Maybe there is more to this love,
maybe it shapes our lives,
and maybe it prepares us for what is beyond.
Whatever it may be, I'm happy for what time that is spent with you.
And even though our love may end when we depart,
at least it gave me all the more reason to live for.
A contest entry
- I Want New Favorites!!! by Paloszoo.
800 points, ended March 22, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Aww I think I ruined the effect of this by listening to comedy music at the same time XD I fail. Like a bungee jumper, jumping off of a cheese wheel and then getting flattened as it rolls over the top of them. Gouda? Nahh... I bet it would be blue cheese. Cause then they'd fail even more. Cause they'd die smelling like shit. Life is life though. It goes on. Until you get run over by a cheese wheel. Yeah... all that ranting for one point. Go me. Go you. Yes go you. XD
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This is so awsome and your right no one really nos if there is a four ever. But soul mates always works things out and stay together.
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I like the way it makes you think about love, and how it shapes and changes our lives.
"I wonder, does it all just end like it never was?"
Interesting thought, and the use of a question makes who is reading it think about that.
This is written so well.
Holly.
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"And even though our love may end when we depart,
at least it gave me all the more reason to live for.'
There is so much truth in these lines! They have such a wonderfully positive feel that left me realising how often we see the negative and ignore the beauty of the moment. Your words have a lovely flow and are so natural and easy to read. Good luck in the contest.
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Promise ... sing
"Maybe there is more to this love,
maybe it shapes our lives,
and maybe it prepares us for what is beyond."
Beyond horizons unperceived
tomorrows' challenge met or lost
love won or incomplete and grieved,
freewill or chance sends fire or frost
preparing causal pathways wreathed
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O: this is very good, i never thought about that, but it makes you think and i like the last line great job
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Very good. This poem made me think a lot about what really does go on after death in regards to 'keeping in touch' with loved ones.
I'm sure this poem wll be a popular one because I'm sure lots of people can relate or have wondered about the same thing.
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Nice write. The feelings are pouring out from the poem, and I liked the flow of the piece. I like the title as well.
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This is a great write with so much emotion. The flow was great too. Nice job!
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This is a beautifully written piece. I loved the flow and the loving emotion behind the lines. Well done. This was really touching.
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Very nice reading. However, to me it reads like prose. Not a bad thing. Perhaps a more metered form would read more poetically.
I can identify with the sentiments as I feel the same about my significant other.
Thank you for sharing.
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It's actually a sonnet.
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wow i like this is has depth and emotion, some people beleive that the ones we love in this life will be there after the end, and with a love as ur, i hope it the best and joyful after life anyone can have. this is a good one, lots of people wonder the same and think simular i know i do. good write i enjoyed it!
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Very sweet and sentimental. Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!
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This is a very sweet poem. Im sure youre girlfriend loves it. Keep writing such great things.
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this is truely beautiful, love is a very curvy path and people often crash around the corners, but some survive the ride, its hard to think that you and your love wont make it when your so in love but i think it's good that you wonder. if you crash, you'll be prepared, but if you dont then... well i guess you dont and it's forever... any way i think this is beautiful! great write!
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this is a very good write. thanx for entering
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A very good piece, although I wish you would have told me what inspired you to write it; that was a rule to the contest. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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wow justin. great piece. kinda reminded me of a way better version of 1 i did... i love how u did this
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The first stanza is my favorite, it prepares the reader for the meaning and message of the entire write.
I am not familar with sonnets (italian or otherwise) but this is an awesome read that has a depth to it.
Enjoyed reading, thanx for sharing this!
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beautiful
you've always been one hell of a writer justin. i love that you flow perfectly with your words, weather they rhyme or not, while sending a message. Those are the traits of an awesome writer. =] im going to school for journalism, i can't wait. keep in touch kid, its been way too long. An old friend, Miss Jaymie. <33 -
que cute!
Total LOVE
[[wonder where you get inspiration from?]]
[[Georgia
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awwh this is a sweet poem i like it
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i like this poem.. its great!!! -
very cute
So sweet so inspiring
darling it's truly amazing
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I can't quite find the words to describe this..........DELIGHTFULLLY ROMANTIC. This poem holds a beautiful message. Good Job
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Awwwww....thats so sweet...u sound like a sweet guy!...that almost..made me cry!...i often wondered if i would find such a thing...and yet i'm stuck..in a fairytale land!...lol..its so cute!...LOVE! <3
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this is sooo sweet!
yea i've wondered about this too.
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I love this.
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Yeah, this one made me wonder too. Nice job here!!
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Really nice.
It touches on the fringes of the thought process,
the bigger picture, a deeper level.
Bringing to the attention that everything is a lesson for the future, even if it's in the past.
Great job brother.
MANY BLESSINGS,
LOWELL POE. -
U lived to love
not sure if u thought u lived to love....but written very well...a few words but very powerful
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well my friend ure poem is very well writtten but what u should consider is..Not if u can live with someone but if u can live without them...if u looked out in the same direction & u saw seperate dreams..there is always something after everything is gone..u have ure dreams...& dreams are what keeps everything alive.....love ure poem ..ure very talented
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what a great write self!
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Beautiful! You've always had a voice for writing and i hope you never abandon that.
great job. =]
-Jaymie
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Wow..this is beautifully written. I love sonnets, and this is really, really good.
I especially liked the last part.
Great job & keep writing !!
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