What could I be doing wrong
you never seem to hint
I really really like you
I'd do anything for a glimpse
I always thought you were gorgeous
but you just think I'm ...what?
I'd really really like to know
Do you think I'm a slut?
Have you even ever thought about
ever loving me?
I really really love you
But we're just not meant to be
And if I ever asked you out
What would you ever say?
I'd really really like to hear
you say yes to me one day.
Author notes
Really just a contest entry but I like this poem a lot.
If you feel the need to tell me its horrible do it!
then i will write better poetry.
In a list
A contest entry
- What The Hell Is Wrong With Him? {Stupid Love} by GypsyEyes.
466 points, ended March 3, 2008, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please judge as critically as you want
Comments
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A very heartfelt write. Sometimes those simple questions can drive a person crazy! Congrats on the Bronze Kat!
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nice poem you truly are gifted.
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oh hell this is what i was thinking about when i made this contest! OMFG! congrats on that! good job! thank you for entering and good luck!
NineTailedFox -
I was surprised by how much I liked this (in a good way!). It read easily, and I like how candid it is.
My only complaint is that the ending seems rather abrupt and doesn't conclude it very well; It would have been more satisfying if there were some sort of conflict (internal or external) and thus a change brought about.
On the other hand, for what it is--an expression of emotion--it's quite good.
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