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Open My Heart

My heart is like a small red bud.
The flower that never opens,
Not unless some guy comes along,
And helps it grow.

I wait for years and years,
And no one catches my eye.
There are handsome ones,
But none that seem amazingly wonderful.

Finally, I find the one I want,
With beautiful blond hair,
Miraculous blue eyes,
And is about six foot.

Apparently I caught his eye, too,
Because he called me
And asked me a question.
I said yes and so did he.

My little red bud was beginning to open.
It only opened a tiny bit,
But there it was,
And he was helping it grow.

The bud of my heart grew rapidly,
As our relationship grew.
Within months,
We knew we loved eachother.

Soon the flower was at full bloom.
It was as big around as a dinner plate,
And was a flaming color red.
It contained thousands of delicate miniature pedals.

This guy was amazing,
And I loved him with all my heart.
I could tell he felt the same
Because his smile was saved just for me.

All of a sudden,
My immeasurable, voluminous flower was gone.
It seemed to have been stolen,
But felt like it had burned.

I looked down at my chest,
To see microscopic ashes falling to the ground.
My love was gone,
And he had taken my heart from me.

My beautiful fiery-red blossom had dissipated
And I was seething with anger.
I hated him for it,
But then that, too, became consumed.

This was the only guy
Who made me feel this way,
And he was the only one I've ever met
That could open my heart the way he did.

Author notes

Well, this is another one for Daniel. I love him so so much and it seems no one knows just how much except me. This really is how he made me feel - like i was completely free. I hope you like it! Option#2 - You left a hole where my heart should be.

I think you've read this one before, but oh well!!

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  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 29, 2008

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    I hate to say this, but there are no prewrites allowed for that option =/ ughhh
    i'm sorry, dear.
    I really do love this poem though
    but it just wouldn't be fair to anyone else.
    ♥


  • HereComesTheSun
    May 1, 2008
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    my favorite poem by you my absolute favorite!!!!!!!! prob adding to my bookmarks

  • HereComesTheSun
    April 28, 2008
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    i love how you told a story threw this poem. i understand how you feel with a guy myself who i felt like i had never felt before with a guy who ended up breaking it off. it sucks and ik the feeling of just wanting to go back to what it was..... great job


  • Popping Balloons
    March 21, 2008
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    thats beautiful "ive got a jar of dirt" and option in authors notes please


  • Melissa Burns
    March 21, 2008
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    Long poem but good Thanks for entering


  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 4, 2008
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    i'm 52 and have lived through this many times. some get lucky and find that 'forever' person right away. for most of us it takes longer which, of course, means our hearts break more than once.
    thank you for entering and good luck i do hope your heart is healing


  • JoshuaScott
    March 1, 2008
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    really like this...good imagery and word choice...


  • loveisthemoment
    February 27, 2008
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    thanks for fixing it! :] good write, thanks for entering, and good luck!


  • loveisthemoment
    February 27, 2008
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    please put what option you chose in your author's comments, I won't read it until you do. thanks!


    • Crazy9Piano8Freak
      February 27, 2008
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      sorry about that... I was at school and was in a hurry - thanks for letting me know!
      Koko


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    February 25, 2008

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    Thanks for entering the contest
    I know how you feel. When I was 10 I met a kid in 4th grade, and loved him for 9 years, even tho we were separated. we found eachother again and he lead me on all summer. I gave up a huge scholarship to college to follow him 900 miles away from home to a college in Georgia. Then two days beofre we were to drive down there together, he broke it off. Turns out he had been cheating on me all summer with his ex. So there I was, with my heart torn out in a new place 900 miles from home with no friends and no desire to live.

    A little later on, I met a Marine on the computer...I wont give a long story about that, but I am married to him now, and I know now that God has a certian someone for everyone. I got over the guy that broke my heart, and can see now that God had better things for me. If God had not had me meet that kid all the way back in 4th grade, I never would have been at the college where I met my Husband. All things work together for good. Trust the one who plans it all out. There are no mistakes from his hand.

    Thanks again for entering and good luck in the contest

    Arrianna


  • Condemd RyeZing
    February 17, 2008
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    It's great. the ending was beautiful, but so was the whole poem. great job. thanks for entering.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    I loved the start of this and the use of the bud, it's such a sweet image. It's hard to hate someone if we have once loved them, it's not proper hate it's hating ourselves for letting this happen, in a way. I know how you mean though, Karl was the first to touch my heart in that way and I can't stand him for it, yet I will never totally forget him or not want to help him if he begs me.


  • Xx Luna xX
    February 8, 2008

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    Thank you for entering

    The first part of this made me miss my boyfriend even more. The ending was well writen and full of emotion. Very sad write. I like it! I hope you feel better soon. Well penned!

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