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Just a fantasy

Funny how it started by you chasing me around the park,then me
falling clumsily on the tickling carpet of grass beneath some oak, or maybe willow?
I'm eternally grateful that the tree roots made a run in my pantyhose.
If I hadn't ripped my tights, you would have never run you finger over the holes.
I get a chill up my spine, and not from the crisp breeze or the sunless sky.
The sap from the trunk drips on my shoulder like honeydew, and you gently sip it off like sugar.

The angel and devil that is my conscious begins to riot like angry children,
Because its hard to decide if your going to be my friend or my sweetheart.
You see my chills, so you give me your favorite worn out, leather overcoat with the broken zipper, without hesitation.
When I first saw that coat at my best friend's house one year ago, to me it was just her brother's jacket.
I feel clueless, yet nowhere in my education does it say that I can't like my best friend's brother.

Forcing myself to ignore my morals, I situate myself in only the present moment.
You tell me you like me the way I am, without lipstick or makeup like everyone else.
I feel a great tension between us, not because we're both shy, but because we both want to take in the moment, not rush it like everything else in our lives.
I still can't believe this is happening, so I do the thing brings me to my common sense every time. I begin to run.
My clumsiness made my getaway very sloppy, because I stumbled as I tried to stand up. Of course, you are quciker and stronger, and softly but firmly grasp my wrist before I even gain my balance.

The second you pulled me close to you, just at the point where my forehead barely touched your chin, was the second I closed off my brain completely, listening only to the rush of my blood. Yet, it only lasted for a second, and I am once again trying to free myself from you, not admitting that I absolutely have wanted this for the six years I've known you.
Suddenly, I am awakened by the morning sun. I knew I was just dreaming.

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  • leander Moderators member
    February 22, 2008
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    This reads more like prose then poetry, but nevertheless, I think it's beautiful
    You have displayed a lot of tenderness within these lines and that's what I was looking for with this contest!

    thank you for entering, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 21, 2008

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    This is so sweet.
    what's more to say but I wish this was the way my romantic years started, innocent and carefree! oh...


  • JinSays gold member
    February 21, 2008
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    Thanks for the list, it took me a minute to find..LOL

    Wonderful entry, you have it in alot of contests, that's for sure...good luck to you..
    Thanks again for playing along, Peace,
    Jin


  • over the rainbow--x
    February 20, 2008

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    You used fantastic imagery to create your dream here, it was lovely, && dreamy [=

    Thanks for entering, good luck in my contest [=
    ♥


  • TabbyCat
    February 20, 2008
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    I LOVE this. So freely written...or it felt that wy. I was taken back to a time when i was the girl with the crush on the seemingly inaccessessible, unattainable boy. Wow. Great job carrying the storyline throughout this piece. I couldn't take my eyes from the page. Wonderful. I hope you win something for this soon.


  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008
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    Dreams can be dangerous at times, especially when toying with emotion. But this is beautifully written. You've crafted an exceptional piece that gives us something fresh to read... I love your tone and flow in the write as well.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • love my jose luis
    February 13, 2008

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    I reallyl ike this poem, I think that a lot of girls do like their best friends brother. I think that you did a great job writing this poem, and thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest.
    ~Maria


  • Entwining Beauty
    February 9, 2008
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    wonderfully wriiten poem good luck in my contest


  • malevolent
    February 8, 2008

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    This is a lovely write for those who are celebrating love. You did an awesome job with giving life to the words. It awakens the senses.

    Please don't think I am being rude by saying this but it isn't a peice that fits into the contest. This is a very beautful and loving peice. I wanted hate for Valentines day...lol. This is to pretty

    You have great talent and keep up the great work!!!


  • Blooming Poet
    February 7, 2008
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    That is one hell one of dream. I wish my dreams were like that. LOL. Great entry.


  • dannyblues
    February 7, 2008
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    list of words

    carpet, pantyhose, honeydew, sugar, riot, sweetheart, overcoat, zipper, clueless, education, lipstick, stumbled

  • JinSays gold member
    February 7, 2008
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    This is great! You have an excellent concept of what I wanted..
    Now, I only need this, a list of words you used inthe word bank. I know they're there, but it's for sorting purposes..
    You did good, with this, I am impressed. Not quite so easy to do..huh?

    Peace,
    Thank you for entering, I will checkback in a few days for that list,
    Jin

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