Sunlight leaps over
the mountain squats in silence
dawn of a new day
A contest entry
- Got 13 words? by Naridill.
380 points, ended February 9, 2008, 31 entries
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Love this
I cna't belive you did not place in this contest as this is an absolutely exquisite incredibly penned poem and I really love the way you wrote this, I love how you broke it down and made this into a true powerful Haiku without having to use punctguation. any ways a very neat well penned poem and keep up the good work
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This piece has beautiful phrasing, the lack of punctuation simmers it a little confusing though.
Thanks for entering,
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Yes, It is a Haiku which does not use punctuation in the conventional sense, but rather uses line breaks to move between thoughts. A good resource:
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I know what a haiku is
But maybe you should have wrote that in authors notes, as forms restrict a lot in a sense. And although it is a form, without knowing, I read as a normal poem.
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The description reads : 13 words in Haiku form....
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The what?
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Go to your contest and read the line under the title. The description of the poem reads '13 words in Haiku form' and it is under the genre of Haiku.
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Or not - lol - it reads it without but because I have it turned off, it's still there. But not when reading only when copying and pasting.
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Dawn
13 words in Haiku form.
by Dave Powell 3 lines, 2 comments, 2 days ago. In Nature, Haiku
• Commented on by judge.
The poem preview.
There is an option in account settings to turn poem previews off and mine are off because I don't want to see the previews of poems. I didn't think that people put the forms in that selection, I thought you'd put in authors notes, sorry. -
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Well, it appears that I learned something new today. I did not know you could turn off the preview or description line. Ah well, it's all good in the end.
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Now that is a beautiful image that you
have described! I love the use of the
word "squat" for that really gives us
a visual of this image.
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