slick with rain
(flattened jackets)
stripping their way
naked your chest
naked
prayer.
A contest entry
- Got 13 words? by Naridill.
380 points, ended February 9, 2008, 31 entries
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Comments
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Really hard to follow, I think you need to change your format so it's easier to read and judge. Good word choice though.
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ok, thanks.
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You format confuses the words to me, I feel its unnecessary and draws much needed attention away from the actual phrasing, apart from that, I nicely written piece.
Thanks for entering,
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Evocative capture of a sensual, inconclusive, pleading moment; elemental. Strong word choices.
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