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revenge

broken hearted,
  Is how you left me.
lifeless,
  Is how i left you.

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  • xXbleedingscarsXx
    September 23
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    short but powerful all the same!

    ~x~shadow~x~@


  • DAMSELx
    June 11, 2008
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    Nice! I liked this one a lot...


  • james119
    February 21, 2008
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    ouch

    you really "cut" to the chase

    Cheers, James


  • Naridill
    February 9, 2008

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    I feel the word arrangement and grammar really place this piece into much confusion. Apart from that - I do feel the direction you went was emotional and worked well.

    Thanks for entering,

  • Judith Chandler
    February 9, 2008

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    A bitter little piece. Revenge can be so sweet. This 13 words says it all and I am rather glad you didn't have more words in which to go on and on about how he/she deserved it. Or maybe "lifeless" is metaphorical?

    Enjoyed your read.

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