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My secret on your lips




I can measure
the day in smiles,

in soft glances


-but never words.






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Help me get away from myself...

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  • Naridill
    February 9, 2008

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    Love the first two lines but I feel you are free falling from there, a little used before but nicely placed here.

    Thanks for entering,


  • dannyblues
    February 7, 2008

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    touching

    yet, you obviously know how to use words beautifully. its the last three words that really hit home.