Music flowing purely
across the page
Beautiful
Author notes
and i wanted to do the counting one
i should've done a b c/d e f/g lol and called it music notes
A contest entry
- Simply Seven Words by LostInTheDream.
400 points, ended February 8, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
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Comments
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no one will probably agree with me because I tend to be "different" as a poet but I think you can use the sticky caps you use in the title to play with the idea of "music flowing...across the page" I also think some sounds would be great here. How does the music flow and what sounds do you here across the page, what is the feeling of the sounds and what do they do. Just a thought. I know you probably did this for a contest so I understand that it's short, but this is great to build on for something else maybe.
Warmly,
Amy -
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i would add more details if it wasn't supposed to be simply seven words
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