you've fallen
hit the ground
and still falling
yet
i'm in the air
Author notes
this sucks, i know...i'm sorry
A contest entry
- Got 13 words? by Naridill.
380 points, ended February 9, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Not sure about the repetitiveness within the 'falling - fallen' I feel something else could have portrayed it more intriguingly. Apart from that - I love the ending, air is a strong and intense word to use in your contest.
Thanks for entering,
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it's really interesting
=]
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no, it's not. quit lying
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stop saying that it sucks and apologizing. you wrote it, be proud of it
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what if i don't want to be proud of it?
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i liked it. it didnt suck.
was this just something you made up for the contest, or is it something you're feeling?
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liar!
lol
something i'm feeling...inspired by something alex said... -
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hmm...interesting. very much so.
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your face is interesting!
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i was about to type: "your cock is interesting" but then i remembered, that a strap on isnt that interesting...
just kidding!! -
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you're an fing jerk
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i'm sorry..
*huggles*
i love you
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no you're not
and no you dont
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you're a liar!!
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yes, yes i am
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oh...dammit. U.U *looks defeated*
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ha! i win!
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yes. yesh you do...
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why the crying face?
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i don't really know...do you?
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yes! i know ALL secrets
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oh, good. because. it was really confuzzling meh.
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ROCK ON CHRIS!
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Thanks thee Alex-and-r!!
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this is a conspiracy!
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you're mother is a conspiracy!!!
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YOUR FACE IS A CONSPIRACY!
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and are falling yet, would be better with and still falling yet.
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