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Dusty Determination

Burn your body
to ashes
Winds will gust
and you'll be everywhere.
Nowhere...

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  • Naridill gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    Perhaps 'nowhere' at beginning of poem to mix with the flow. Love the start alliteration but the poetic devices fall muchly from there. You have a simplicity for description, but it works.

    Thanks for entering,

  • Judith Chandler
    February 8, 2008

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    It's incredible how much you can say in 13 words. You have said a lot and you left me with chills, quite overwhelmed in fact. "everywhere. Nowhere..." An excellent write.