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Daddy

I was stuggling to find a way,
To put right this ultimate wrong,
Maybe I would have said goodbye,
If I knew all along.
But I know by now it wouldnt help,
If I had said goodbye,
Because I still lost my father,
When you lost your life.

I miss you so much daddy,
But I want say goodbye,
And tell you that I love you,
And I wish you didnt die.
You may not have been a saint,
But you were still my dad,
You may not have been the best,
But you were the only one I ever had.

Author notes

Really bad rhyming, and a wee bit cliche, Im aware, but I wrote it for my dad. RIP Daddy, I love you *heart*

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  • emo001
    May 16, 2008
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    i thought it was amazing


  • ShinyBUBBLESxo
    February 23, 2008

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    I absolutely loved this one!! the emotion was wonderful.. and i really got the feeling that it was coming from the point of view of a younger child, though i am nit sure if it was meant to be that way. Wonderful job. You are very talented!

  • Shrouded in Mystery
    February 12, 2008

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    OMG this is so sad. I like this poem....
    well done! it came from your heart. it's just so sad.
    (sniff sniff)


  • glitterydoom
    February 8, 2008

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    aww that is so sweet, loss is always hard, but I'm sure you'll get throght it. I'm always here if you need to talk!

    its only the end but of the first stanza that doest rhyme (which I'm sure your aware of) but poems dont always have to rhyme

    this almost made me cry

    Hollie
    xxx


  • minith
    February 8, 2008
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    aw

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