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Strength

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~ May your higher power,

and power of your quill,

always be your strength ~

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Just 13 words.
Ends tomorrow when I come online.
But goodnight for now.

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  • Ithica silver member
    April 11, 2008
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    Ideally we should let our higher power do all the work and free our minds....


  • Aerden gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    Oh, I like that--the juxtaposition of something fragile representing something strong. That's good!


  • N e a r
    February 15, 2008
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    I like the meaning and stability of this poem, dad. This is inspirational, and it pertains to us writers. Excellent view point. I find that the repeating of the word "power", even with a different meaning each time, weakened the effect on the poem. Especially since they are only seperated by one word/line.
    ~

    Your son,
    M a r l u x i a


  • Naridill
    February 9, 2008

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    Three 'yours'
    Two 'power'

    Five words repeated and gone. I feel, although beautiful and smart advice, as a short piece, the word use is wasted somewhat and could be more effective with less repeating.

    Thanks for entering,

  • Mailservhr
    February 8, 2008

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    a deer print in the ice

    I can feel words left out and it is good; like 51windsor vs. 51cleveland; you've done great Arkbear; good luck in the contest.


  • tomisb
    February 8, 2008

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    In the stillness where I hear the words lies close to the space where God talks to me.Lovely poetry.

    Love,
    Tom B.


  • Frozentearz
    February 8, 2008

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    Ahh some beautiful thoughts for any poet that may come across it
    Well done My Dear Bear well done, Cain't think of any other words that could make it any better,
    you have done well,
    Love and light,
    Frozentearz


  • Pandorea
    February 7, 2008
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    lovely. so whort yet true and actually really great.


  • thelordreigns gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Beautiful and true. There is so much power in our writing. This is a sure winner!

    - joanne


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    February 7, 2008
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    powerful write EXCELLENT GOD BLESS

  • Judith Chandler
    February 7, 2008
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    typo in line one.


  • Patpowers silver member
    February 7, 2008

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    Way to go Arkbear! This one is a winner! Good luck in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    February 7, 2008

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    WOW!!! My Dearest Uncle,

    The power of your words here!! This is great!!! I love it!! I hope the power you speak of in this one, carries you through many more wonderful pieces such as this!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

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