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Dark Seductress

Inside all grown men's fantasies
that keep them up passed their time
lies a queen who controls all thoughts
and even all delinquent minds

This being is never seen
and is seldom ever heard
except to those deceitful men
the kind she always adores

She comes to them in their dreams
but they don't truly know
that she takes the form of their wives
seducing them to the point of no return

She wears nothing except her ivy and leaves
gracefully put into her silky star filled hair
luring them patiently
but never letting open their wondering eyes

For if they catch a glance of her
and stare at her emerald gem eyes
all they will remember is the smoldering crescent
etched into their pathetic soul, her slave for eternity’s night






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Prompt:
Option 9- Read my mind if you dare
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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    "She wears nothing except her ivy and leaves
    gracefully put into her silky star filled hair
    luring them patiently
    but never letting open their wondering eyes"

    Make me think of the Poison Ivy character in the Batman movie, played by Uma Thurman

    Anyways, marvelous poem.


  • joleahe
    April 1, 2008

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    great poem for the pic...but im just not feeling it. not striking my emotions..maybe if you changed the flow a little bit...but thank you


  • suicideangel91
    February 25, 2008
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    i like how this poem is written but i dont like how it portrays women.


    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      February 25, 2008
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      I'm glad you like how it is written, and I'm not trying to portray that this is how us women are, it was the picture that was presented for the prompt I chose....


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    Congratulations :- I am delighted to award you this Gold trophy.
    Your words spoke to me in a way that I felt at the time
    Keep penning your creative writes and hope in future you enter further contests
    Thanks again
    Julie

  • Reptile Lady gold member
    February 8, 2008
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    Amazing and hard hitting write
    I have read over this twice, and will no doubt read again.
    Wow I love the punch, powerful, deep and such seduction
    I would love to know the story behind this, if there is one.. but you have made me think OUCH!
    etched into their pathetic soul, her slave for eternity’s night
    love this line...
    Thanks for your entry
    Julie


  • Dmonik
    February 7, 2008

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    Ahh, now the question is...Is she a dream, or a
    succubus? lol
    I like this, how you've created the 'perfect' imaginary 'friend' for a man. It's well written, and hits the nail on the head!
    Bravo!

    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      February 7, 2008
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      I don't know, it's up to the reader...*evil smile*
      Thank you very much, I loved the picture I chose, and all the other one's!

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