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Imaginative Snow

Missing image

          Original artwork by Renelle Sommerville


An empty lot, what be the cause,

Perhaps the drifting snow?

Will it be thus till springtime’s thaws,

Or is there more to know?

The woods behind are well defined,

Or are they really there?

Creations of her fertile mind

And quite artistic flair.

The snow quite deep, it couldn’t stay,

T’was yesterday it stormed.

What was it then they cleared away?

Snow angels, newly formed.

A track left there by lonely car,

It’s come . . . but now it’s gone.

The empty lot seems quite bizarre,

Real . . . or carefully drawn?

Her eyes oft see reality

That brain and hands transform,

And when the two of them agree

A simple winter storm

Becomes a well-cleared parking lot,

Backed by barren trees.

A scene transmuting counterplot,

Renelle’s facsimiles.

Amazing is her artistry,

That touches spirit’s core.

And when her work is shared with me,

My soul just seems to soar.

The painting is of things that are,

But just not as they’re shown.

Like tracks left there by phantom car,

And drifts the wind has blown.

Her world seen through inventive eyes,

And filtered through her heart.

Her paintings sooth, like lullabies,

Serenity through art.

Author notes

This is the 14th collaboration that Reni and I have done and as long as she paints, I'll write. She sends a painting and I think she's sent me a photograph - she's amazing indeed.

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  • Arrianna MacEwan
    February 7, 2008

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    Beautiful!!!!!!!!

    Your flow is always perfect,
    your words always so sweet,
    If only I could write like thee,
    My life would be complete.


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    February 7, 2008

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    Wow just beautiful,a great write and a great background,as I love winter myself this touched me,Hazel


  • Jraehazy
    February 7, 2008

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    the A,B,A,B rhyme scheme is good, give the poem a good flow when read, especially read aloud. Winter is definately my favorite season so I really ejoyed your poem. Good Job!


  • Demington
    February 7, 2008

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    A very nicely done collaboration. The poetry is simply structered, yet stated in a way that implies the sort of depth that keeps the reader tied into the "plot" of a poem.

    You almost lost me with line 26, but the way you tied this more abstract aspect of the poem into the rest of it really worked well.

    Good stuff


  • sapphireangelwings
    February 7, 2008

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    This was so lovely! I thought the take on the picture was quite fascinating indeed. I love to read other's poetry when using picture prompts! I am never left unamazed at what other's perceive! Beautifully done.


  • KytKitsune
    February 7, 2008
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    This is an interesting poem, using the picture as a medium without leaving the picture in too much or leaving the picture out entirely except for one line. Its a perfect balance of poetic artistry. Keep it up!
    ~~AngelCatt

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