Hath times forward motion ceased?
With each moment solo spent
My heart's longing doth increase
For her fair love's intent
Mind's eye needed rest refuse
Constant upon her face
Humored here the poet's Muse
Dreaming of sweet embrace
Ideas pondered,still I wonder
What the future mists conceal
A coming soldier,still I hold her
Could this vision be real?
yea,yet another work in progress..
Author notes
Time to try something new. Decided I'll play with Shakespearean and see what comes out.
A contest entry
- Love Poems. by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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would you like my phone number? haha jk
This is really good.
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this is very hot and cool all at the same time
Love the language of love
Oh but if it still truly existed
Truly, Lady Anya
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damn , mason
WOW is pretty much all i can say, i like the period language , it adds an element of eloquence to your work, its verry pretty in its message and it reveals an emotional focus, well done youngster
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i would take the "the" out of the title...i just think it sounds better. even though "the" is in the poem...the title doesn't have to match exactly.
honestly that's one of my favorite parts of writing is coming up with the title.
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I liked how this turned out. It seems a little unfinished to me though, maybe you could add more. I enjoyed the language and your rhyming was nicely done.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Aww, wow, that's wonderful Mason.
I like the sytle of it.
Very good.
I could never pull it off.
"Mind's eye needed rest refuse
Constant upon her face
Humored here the poet's Muse
Dreaming of sweet embrace"
I think those lines are beautiful.
^_^
ily
-Jess
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Title : What future mists conceal
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lol,did use an "i" didnt I?,blonde moment.
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i like it...by the way it's "embrace".
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I like it!!!!
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