..today I feel
as though I want us
to be children together...
laughing and playing
and seeing all around us
with big eyes of wonder
and excitement......
you,
the little boy in
the garden with butterflies
and I,
the tiny girl,
peeping over the gate
wanting so much to join
you in play...
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Ever have a day like this?...
Please tell me what you think...
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I have a day like this almost every day, I don't know many who would not yearn for that childhood innocence again. To be able to run and play and you're biggest worry was whether it was going to rain or not. Beautifully done, it makes me yearn once again for those days...
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...Is it raining today?...lol..I love rainy days...I'm a puddle jumper!...thanks for the fun comment, Garrett. Peace, Rhonda
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For me this seems to pick up again from the source of your magical 'childhood' memories which I've tasted before.
It's really wonderful and so moving Rhonda. I also suspect very meaningful and beneficial for yourself as much as for us reading them.
Bless you
Sol
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...Sol, your comments are always filled with gentle and soothing words...I so appreciate them. Great insight you have, my brother.Peace, Rhonda
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Oh my gosh! This is DIVINE!!! I love it. Really, really love it.
today I feel
as though I want us
to be children together
Just these lines in themselves...oh! They're beautiful.
Do I ever have a day like this? Yes, absolutely. Every day of my life.
I so want us all to be children together. How much more fun and loving life would be. And so beautiful when you find someone who you can feel like this with.
Come over and play in my garden with me anytime!
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Not sure if I ever replied to this Skye...if not, here.....YOU ROCK!...Your comments just come busting off the page and make me smile...EVERY TIME!...Love that about you, Peace to you, Rhonda
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Actualy I have and it was recently. When ever I get around my new friend that is what we feel. We are both adults yet it feels so good to act like little kids with each other. It seems to bring out another side of us when we connect. So anyway beautiful write!
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Sorry for the late reply, foryourowngood, and thanks for the personalized comment...I know the feeling you speak of and I love to act as a child sometimes too...best wishes for you and your new friend... Peace, Rhonda
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I love the image created here, and the subtext behind it. The last two stanzas are my favorite. Is there any specific sort of laughing or playing that they're doing? I'm just wondering, because if you had something in mind, maybe you could put it there... but this is fun. It made me smile.
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My apologies for so late a reply, redteacup....I had images of games I played as a child, but I wanted the reader to be able to put their own games into the piece...that is partly why I used the word garden rather than yard, it expands the context, or so I thought. Great comment, thanks! Peace, Rhonda
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I look at my kids with a similar wonderment. I wish weren't so busy that I couldn't spend a day just playing in the garden.
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Hi there, I do apologise for the lateness of this reply because your comment is so touching and so well understood by me and probably every parent on the site...I loved those days when I could play with my kids when they were very young...every moment is a jewel in a crown of priceless moments with them, take the time my friend...everything that interferes is just dross..
...thanks for your great comment, Peter...Love, Rhonda
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the tiny girl,
peeping over the gate
wanting so much to join
you in play...
they tiny girl--- what is the age of yours. it is a again good poem.
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the age?...I hadn't thought about actual age...but I suppose I would say four or five...very young...innocent was more the image I sought...thank you for the question, my friend...it gave me a reason to walk through the garden again...Peace, Rhonda
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a wonderful offering, and really just in time for valentines day as well - simple and romantic, hopeful and wishing for a playmate. blessings and best wishes,
~r. ;f
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cool!
nice imagery, and nice light happy subject!
and we should all have days like the one described here.
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Excellent
All of us have the longing to go back to the childhood state of bliss, especially when the world around is full of falsity.
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and I,
the tiny girl,
peeping over the gate
wanting so much to join
you in play...
Ah..I love the innocence and the honesty of the soul here..Indeed a great piece is here..well done....
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