Thunderstorms passing over my house,
Floorboards shaking with a scream.
Horses neighing in the barns,
People trying to calm them down.
Sitting the night around a fire,
Trying to keep calm as the winds flail around.
Lightning striking not far away,
My children crying out of fear.
Finally sleeping at quarter past two,
And waking at sunrise to see the new day.
Author notes
Picture Prompt: http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2389/865.jpg?1202389557
A contest entry
- Image Inspired S by HeavenScent4U.
300 points, ended February 20, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be up front and honest and tell me what you think.
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there's a lot said here but for me the only line that i got that fit the image was the last line but i know it is all personal perspective too
the only other advice i would have here is not starting every line with a capital letter, one of my biggest pet peeves in poetry 
thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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I wrote it in a way to show how the new day came to be, it was meant to show that even the worse things can bring beauty. As for the capital letters, I shall think about it.
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Great job, typo on Lightning though.
I loved it Jeff, lots of imagry; reminds me when I was younger, watching the storms from my porch, and going to sleep only to wake up to sunshine! Yay!!
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Thanks Sarah.
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