Kiss me baby
Like this time is the end
I promise my lips are clean
{Just laced in venom}
Hold me baby
Like it won’t ever happen again
I promise my body is clean
{Just laced in venom}
Love me baby
Like tonight is your last
I promise my love is clean
{Just laced in venom}
Kiss me
Hold me
Love me
Baby just know
I am laced in venom
Author notes
Option 6: Laced in venom......
A contest entry
- Pif and Inspire :- Many Options by Reptile Lady.
825 points, ended February 9, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So?
Comments
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This is a great write indeed
I loved the lyrical flow through out and how you ended this poem.
Thanks for your entry
Julie -
Very good muse here
As the spider to the fly I like the take on this write and wish you the best on the contest
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I enjoyed reading this! Good luck in Julie's contest.
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i like it
but i don't like the repitition of laced in venom...i think i would like it better if that changed throughout the work..like once it was 'laced in venom' the next it was poison or something...idk...
i like the poem, though -
I thought it was a secret that you're laced in venom. haha. Good job. For some reason I like the format of this.
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