You're screaming as I kiss you
And you struggle when we hug.
So I hold on to you tighter
As I love
My Latest Drug.
You're smiling as I fight you
And you're holding to my hand
I wish that I could make you see
But you don't understand.
So kiss me one more time
-And giggle in the dark.
-Our fights and misconceptions
Just add on to
The spark.
But you're more than just a thriller
(Cause I know I'll never win.)
In every way that's possible
You get
Under
My
Skin.
"My Latest Drug" I called you.
- All I need to just survive.
But maybe you should stay...
(Been years since I felt this
Alive.)
Author notes
I was remembering the line
"You are exactly my brand of Heroin."
Edward said it to Bella.
And... I don't know.
It just suits Maddy and I.
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ooooooooolllllllala.....
Expressive.Wonderful display of concrete PASSION.that sets the spark to the whole thingy.and its spisey. i loved reading this.
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you know, this lovey dovey phase doesnt sound as bad as you think it does.
i loved it.
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OMG
Beautiful, perfect, exactly how i feel right now. You are an amazing artist and u have created a masterpiece. I have nothing more to say!!!!! BRAVO!!!
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REALLY GOOD
i loved it
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good write
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amazing
i like how you compaired the addictiveness of a drug to love for another human being it was a very beautiful work that you displayed. ive never felt love like that but its amazing that you have. the only thing i would realy change about this poem is the name the whole drug thing is somewhat imfasized in the poem so i would change the name to better emphasize it.
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Very Creative and a Good Use of Talent
Like the poem and I like the topic. Great verbal skills used in this poems. You have talent, please don't let it go to waste. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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i love this! A great book I must say...hehe. I love the style you have here, how you organize your lines. very nice! sounds deep and tasteful!
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Aw, how cute. I liked the title of this, and how well it fit into your write. Creative piece, thanks for sharing and keep up the good work.
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Absolutly amazing.
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I don't know what it is about this poem, but it really hits you hard.
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awesome!
oh wow i dont know if it just my dirty mind thinking wrong but i like it! Im in a new relationship that is alot like this. Thanks for sharing good job!
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Love it.
This piece actually epitomizes my relationship--myself--my life--me...? That isn't what pulled me in, though. No, your syntax and diction combined to form an asymmetrical type of swinging rhythm in my mind, [though maybe it was just that your words harmonize so gently with those inside my mind] and created something very real from simple words on a computer screen burning itself into my retinas.
Love it.
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WOW!
I really love this piece. It flows really well and catches the readers attention from the very beginning. It helps to pull readers in with an intrigueing title like you have here.Very good job I love this!I especially love the lines:
But you're more than just a thriller
(Cause I know I'll never win.)
In every way that's possible
You get
Under
My
Skin.
"My Latest Drug" I called you.
- All I need to just survive.
But maybe you should stay...
(Been years since I felt this
Alive.)
Great job!!!
God Bless,
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I know I have already commented on this poem, but I've Just read it again, and I have to make another comment.....I love it! I can really relate to it, that person that really gets "under your skin" and has a hold on you. You really lay out how it feels, especially when there is someone that I feel this about, I really feel this poem. Have some applause....
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i love this poem. it's very well written. it's different than you see most written but i think that's what makes it unique and really again. great job it was a pleasure to read.
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Such a good write. I haven't read a happy ending love poem lately, but this one makes me believe that true love is still out there. Very good write!
Keep writing
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excellent
i like this, while the structure is something new i havent seen before it kept its hold on me till the very end...good one!
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Wow
OMG, even before I read the Author Notes, I was thinking of Edward and Bella, wow. Go You!!! I really love this by the way! Oh and I read that thing where you said that you love this but you don't normally love your word, well, I say you should love all your work! Good or bad it's apart of you, so be proud!
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i love this
i feel the tention in your word and how much you want "your lateset drug"
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Great poem. Great rhyming scheme, great rhythm, a very clear understandable poem. brilliant! I enjoyed reading it.
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I like it
it made me think of Twilight (and i read your authors notes after the fact so thats really cool on how it made me think of that automatically)
this was a really great write
i really liked the rythm and flow it had
the way you would start a statement then skip a line to continue the thought. like the lines
"Just add on to
The spark."
this is an amazing write and i could really relate
thanks for sharing ♥
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"You're screaming as I kiss you
And you struggle when we hug.
So I hold on to you tighter
As I love"...this part to me...stood out more than anything....i kno how you feel......well writtin
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this is awesome
I LOVE the structure, the way you've separated out the last line of each stanza, to emphasise it. An excellent and well written write. well done
xx
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awwww this is so great i really like this. excellent work this is adoreable
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It is a good one dear poet. Thank u for sharing it with us. Good day
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Omgosh I absolutely LOVE this write!! Its the best write I've read in a long time!!!! Keep up the good work!!
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well done
my favorite lines:
"And you struggle when we hug.
So I hold on to you tighter
As I love
My Latest Drug."
it flows very well. it's playful yet both dark and tender. i like it a lot.
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your right
this is a wonderful poem i loved
it
i love it when you say ....
'You're screaming as I kiss you
And you struggle when we hug.
So I hold on to you tighter'... i love it because it shows that if you love someone you always will even if they dont feel the same at times
i really liked it
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sweet....
i like the rhyming scheme of this poem! lovely work!
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It does suit you two.
And Amber stole the story I was going to tell you
But that's ok.
It's a cute poem
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this is wonderful. well written and constructed in a really cool way. and i can relate...in a way.
loved it.
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well written
I like it, it reminds me of an old freind of mine. I think you did well in taking a line and making it your own w/ your feelings and experiences and the fact that its well written i give you points for that. i hope everything works out w/ you and your signifigant other.
great write
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i like it
but at times it was a bit confusing
but other than that it was good
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I have to say
I really like this work. In a couple places the flow stumbles, but it catches itself quickly. A beautiful job. This poem makes me happy for you. That you can write this like you have. Good job.
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Thats kick ass..
And i love that book
the series really lol.
I have yet to finish the last book. Anyways.
Yea this poem rocks my sox. If i were holding a contest and this was in it you'd at leatse win silver!
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I love those books. I wouldn't want to be anyone's drug and I wouldn't want anyone to be my drug. I don't know, but it was a very good and descriptive poem full of a kind of crazy slipping over the edge feeling. I don't like that feeling, it makes me feel out of control in a strange way. Chaos. I like chaos when i'm the one who caused it but not when it's forced on me.
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I like this one, it does suit you and Maddy. When Sonya was walking me to my bus she said, look its Mia and Maddy fighting again. . . big surprise. (lol)
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wow this is really really good.
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Beautiful piece, good concept with the whole drug thing. I liked the rhyme and usually I'm not a fan of it so kudos to you!!!
Love Always,
Caroline
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edward=love. this poem is très cool!
it flows extremely well.
yay!
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love it
this is fantastic...the rhyming scheme and the way you spaced out the words really adds to the effect...wonderful
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whoa this is so awesome all i can say is WOW. The flow and wording was amazing
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Very nice read.
I like the word choice and usage.
The flow is good. Different than most and pretty unique, but that just adds to the overall read. Definately made it a lot more enjoyable.
It actually left me with something to walk away with. I like giving something back to the reader like that. Very enjoyable.
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woahh. my account went crazy so that was me btw. VVV
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this was awesome!
i've only read a few of your newest poems but this one is by far the best.
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Nice job. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing with us.
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great write up
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Lol! My boyfriend and I compare our kisses to Heroin and Crystal Meth respectively...
Great write!
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Wow, great write i enjoyed it.. Great job and keep up the good work =)
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Great write you should be proud of it very much.
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This is very good! You have all the reason in the world to like it!! It flowed beautifully! Great patteren too! Keep it up!!
-hk
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Love it. It's amazing. Nice concept and carried out extremely well--flawless flow and word usage! I like it!
~QoA
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Love is a drug. I love how you showed how it can be a drug for you. This is a very good piece. I liked the style it was written in, and I like the way the piece can be relatable to anyone. Been there... I know how it feels to be totally in love with someone, and be addicted to them, but they don't show the same feelings for you. I thought that this was a very honest write. Keep up the good job.
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This is such a beautiful piece.
It is as if you give the reader a glimpse into your heart.
"You're screaming as I kiss you
And you struggle when we hug.
So I hold on to you tighter
As I love
My Latest Drug."
I know whats it feels like to have a soul who feeds off drugs,
and there is no feeling as beautiful as finding someone,
who gets you high off their love.
Blessed be.
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Love is a very strong drug and these words showed it. Looking at the author notes I think it's better you didn't use that line in it. This had some vivid images in it and it was a great read. I do have one suggestion for it. In that last line you could add the word "way" after this and put a comma after it. Then it will lead into that word "Alive". Excellent and thank you for sharing with me. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥
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this was AMAZING!!!
I loved the last line
Been years since I felt this Alive
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Pretty good
I think it's better to not pin your descriptions too specifically, personally. I would leave it as is, as far as comparisons. I personally also wouldn't use as much punctuation like periods and hyphens. I prefer not to because i find it distracting and i also think your usage of parenthesis takes away from the possibility of interpretation. I like to leave as much room for interpretation as possible so people can come up with their own meaning.
This might not be what you're going for though. Otherwise, i think the poem is pretty cool, but just make sure you don't get sucked into the drama. I have a friend who has made a relationship out of how much her and her bestfriend fight, so all they really ever do in each other's presence is bicker. What's the point of conditioning yourself to expect negative emotions? As a recovering cutter myself, I have found that it's helpful to reduce negativity in my life while learning to cope with it better so when i do encounter it, i can resist cutting more. Does this sound too preachy? Does it even make sense? If not, feel free to disregard it. Good luck with everything, truly. I know it's hard.
lizbian
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This is awesome!!! I really enjoyed this read! It is very lyrical too. I also favor the line in the author notes. You are amazing with words. Keep this up!!!
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i loved this..
amazingly wow..
just wonderful
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i love this
it is amazing
just...wow...
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This is pretty much the best thing ever. I love the way it rhymed, and I love the topic! The whole 'you're my drug' comparison is cliche but you've played it off the very best. I'm definitely going to read more of your work.
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