Living alone
Investment secure
Finding a way to
Endure
In silent venture
Sobering thoughts
Having no help
Anticipation of future
Reaching for success
Damn
Author notes
Image Inspired J
(acoustic)
In a list
A contest entry
- Image Inspired J by HeavenScent4U.
300 points, ended February 14, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I think this reads much better having added that word
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This is an interesting piece and you have drawn on the image as a stimulus very well. Your word choices are succinct and the shortness of the lines creates impact in all the right places. I think the last word has impact although perhaps alters the style of tech piece rather dramatically. Great write, keep it up. Amber x x x
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I have to say that I really like this
Very nice for an acrostic which I believe you spelled in your notes as acoustic lol I do have one suggestion for you though. Lines 3 and 4, maybe if you added the word "to" after the word "way" it would read better as in finding a way TO endure thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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yes insecurity in the promp,,but young freedoms to excite , well done xx
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This is a very interesting write you have here. I think I like its ending the best.
dani
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