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Syncopated Conversations

Disjointed
                broken
interjected
                  piecemeal
avalanche
            of
                words
on tourists’ tongues - more felt than heard -
threads of meaning
scrambled knotted twisted
                                                  out of line
bombarding senses
intertwined with attempts
at sharing sense while sitting
        at
sidewalk cafés
sipping coffee by the Rhine



James Gagiikwe © 2008

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eavesdropping by osmosis

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  • SandhyaSuri
    January 14, 2009

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    virtual reality

    The poem has a virtual realisitc texture that made me feel I was sipping coffee while I absorbed all that was around.
    I was there! Any poetry that can transfer me wherever it intends to take me and transfer me there like reality is worth its salt.


  • Midgetbridgey
    May 25, 2008

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    Great job!
    you made it seem like i was there!
    You have a talent for descriptions and I hope to see more
    Goodjob!!
    -midgetbridgey

  • Tlr051408
    May 15, 2008
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    I was there. The way you wrote what you were expressing was exactly like what I was hearing in my mind's eye and imagination. WOW. I really liked this. In every separate word you strung together the snapshot perfectly. I could almost hear the almost-annoying background noise that you dressed so neatly. Because it, this, really was, written neatly.


  • ea silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    haha... I can relate this one only now it is the English that sounds broken when I am in the company of tourists. When were you by the Rhine?