In all, autumn hopes,
cool us in winter desires
Dreams, then, spring tears
Author notes
Dreams then spring tears
A contest entry
- contest for haiku/senryu, cinquain, sedoka by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended February 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow!
This is very clever...you're only missing one season...fall! IMHO...I think 
, this being Haiku could be better presented as thus:
in all, autumn hopes
cool us in winter desires
dreams then spring tears
This is so dreamy and elegant. I've got a suggestion for line 3 I'll send to you!
Loved
this. 
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Beautifully Inspirational!!
Your poem is very profoundly thought-provoking, with a dash of melancholy thrown in there, as well... Thank you for sharing your Haiku, and pen on, Poet!! 
Peace,
Cyn
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This is beautiful. To me this says I love the winter's embrace and cry a the spring rains come, lol. Thanks for sharing. I see this because winter and autumn are my favorite seasons. UNT
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this is lovely work. love the play with the seasons - so expressive.
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lovely
lovely, yet..do I need to finish my ncomplete forms education? Has the setup of a Haiku ..yet only 4 feet in the last line? It's very nice , am looking for more examples of.
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a good form piece, ah spring tears, i think of smiles here though for those tears wash the land with water and bring new life.
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That was lovely to enjoy!
way to write on that prompt too...dreams then spring tears...good discipline Haiku writer!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
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Very nicelol
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I'm not familiar with haiku/senryu but your words are beautiful. I especially like spring tears.
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Forgot applause!
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Wonderful!
spring tears make flowers in our hearts...
I love this form that you contructed with great care...
The emotional effect of the seasons on daily life is beautifully and clearly felt with these words... -
Like how you have used all three season in these three short lines. You might want to check the haiku information about capitals - do not need them in this for at all. Hope this helps.
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2340132
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nice thought.
Thank you for participation.
Best wishes and good luck
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