Tiny diamond glitter
Within thin circle gold
Nestled, central, dimpling
The softness of your lobe
Author notes
I'd like to extend this in the future.
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For David
A contest entry
- Stunning bling! by Tattboyspet.
300 points, ended February 11, 2008, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think? Can you suggest a better title
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Wonderful potential!
There is a resonance here beyond the simple description...a delicate hint of the way the gem touches the heart of the wearer. This calls out for an expansion...perhaps into the metaphor of the jewel of a life affecting the spirit of another? Wherever it takes you, let it be to a place of joy and wonder.
Falstaff/Toby2
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well i think its a great start! good description, pretty soft jewelery!
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I'm afraid I cannot comment on this piece as it says "TO BE CONTINUED" but the contest has now closed
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Sorry was going to finish yesterday but became ill.
J.P. Troy
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