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First Time

Laying me down gently nervous as hell, looking at me telling me not to worry, that this will go well.
Hugging me with great intensity, pulling me close with little density.
Kissing me gently, trying to calm me down, caressing my crown.
You reach under me to play with my virgin tomb, down inside wishing to one day fill my womb.
Touching, caressing, until you make me scream, enjoying hearing that delious sound knowing you made me cream.
Pulling away from me, as you move your hand upward, looking at my face, causing my heart to race.
Can't hold in this feeling any longer, you move above me, about to move in, into my treasured cove, my sacred den.
I shiver in fright about what's to come next, feeling uneasy and a bit perplexted.
You hugged me tightly with a warm embrace, and told me to get ready for this heated race.
Telling me not to worry, I'll be genlte with you,make you feel good and anew.
As you put it in takign my ultimate treasure, crying out from all this great pleasure.
Holding me tight to erase my fright, you look at me saying.."Everythings going to be alright."
Moving in me harder and faster going at a rapid but gently pace, tracing all my tears away, putting me in a state of grace.
Couple of thrusts later, after coming down from the sky, ending our high.

You pull me closer to you nice and snug...telling me not to cry, caressing my lips and thigh.

As we began to fall asleep from our exhausted climb, of being with together as one for the first time.

Author notes

I just wrote this now so I hope you love this. Prayers

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  • Midnight-x-Rose
    February 29
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    I know how you feel, my first time was nerve wracking and scary. It didn't hurt too much, but it was more confusion and fear that I would do it all wrong and he was the same. The condom broke with us, which make it very awkward indeed. I like this, it's honest and sweet. Glad he was gentle with you and understanding.
  • As we began to fall asleep from our exhausted climb, of being with together as one for the first time.

    how wonderful your scenario is ..I love the pace and the immagery..thanks for your entry....


  • XXirishroseXX
    February 7
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    Very intense and sensual, good job!
  • FaeryFallenAngel
    February 7
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    ****Do NOT rate/reply/return the favor [messages included] to this comment****

    You forgot to put (without quotation marks) "Prayers" in your author's notes. When you do that I'll come back to read this.

    If you don't do this by Saturday, February 9, 2008 I'll DQ this piece.

    Thanks in advance

    Aden Recreated

  • rhondasail
    February 7

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    This is a very innocent write from one seeming very young. You gave the perspective of a man above you, a man leading you, a man reassuring you, and a man continuing to hold you long after...this is a lovely traditional image. You've used some sensual language(virgin tomb, sacred den) and some descriptive practical language(putting 'it' in, moving harder and faster) as well, which sets the sense of the 'First Time'. There are a few typos, but they didn't distract from the flow at all. Well done! Good luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda

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