What is this life I live?
Full of love to give
Always kept inside
to protect my wounded pride
So many dreams to chase
and feel your warm embrace
Standing on the salty shore
Watching dreams never felt before
Gazing out towards the sea
As my dreams swim free
Constantly out of reach
From this lonely desolate beach
Just one more nightmare
Before my answered prayer
I swim through all debris
After my dreams, I search the Sea
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This is amazing.... It made me feel the ocean ... and some phrases are just stunning... like -
1. Standing on the salty shore
Watching dreams never felt before
2. Just one more nightmare
Before my answered prayer
I don't know why, but this second phrase is a tiny bit more appealing to me... maybe because its exotic.
Great write
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you are welcome
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"Just one more nightmare
Before my answered prayer"
Wow. That's a very unique concept and in my opinion the best line in the poem - though as a whole this is VERY good.
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You are amazing Steve, no one can read and not feel you in what you write.
This is so full of expression and wistfulness.
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a good one
besides the dreams to be chased, the opening lines are remarkable for its message- to live is to give love. -
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love the metaphor of the sea here! yes, our dreams are out there somewhere in that vast ocean just waiting for us to actualize them. nice poetry!
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A superb write!
It is really a superb write dear friend!
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you are such an amzaing writer i hope someday i can be as good as you
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thank you
-Steve-
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Wonderful poignant write my friend-striving and searching as we are all of us constantly doing-
Blessings
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I'm glad you enjoyed it
-Steve-
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