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Cloud Magic (Cinquain)

White clouds
so beautiful
Changer shape before you eyes
Always delight, always surprise
Float by.

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A contest entry

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  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    February 11, 2008

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    excellent~

    I know what you mean about the changer shape...
    Can be beautiful for a few moments then poof its all gone..and all the beauty of that precious cloud...
    Sometimes I see faces in them..and then just really weird ones before a storm comes brewing....
    Best of luck in the contest...
    A beautful Cinquain...haven't done one in ages..
    ..
    Hope you come by and visit my poem here as well
    Hugs
    Susan~~~~


  • Charity Ann
    February 7, 2008

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    I had to review what a Cinquain was before I commented...nicely done! I'm not sure about "are" in line two, maybe you could have used another one word syllable to describe them. Otherwise you did a very nice job of describing the simplistic beauty of a cloud. I enjoyed "always delight, always surprise." I've never thought of a cloud as delightful, but they really are. Thanks for your entry....good luck!