When you watched me fall,
I knew that we weren't "meant to be"
Like all of the princesses in their stories.
When you watched me cry,
And didn't even try and comfort me,
I knew that we just weren't right for each other,
That there was nothing more than friendship.
When you ditched me to go and hang out with that clique you call your "friends"
I knew that we couldn't be around each other without one being hurt.
And that one almost always being me.
When you never talked to me,
And avoided me in the halls,
I knew that it was truly over,
That we were nothing,
That I was just another girl who fell for your tricks.
You're no different than the others hun,
Not even close.
Author notes
This is pretty all over the place, no? I really didn't know how to get this one down, so I tried the best way I could. I hope everyone likes it. But I think I'll probably end up working on it some more.
A contest entry
- Make Me Sad by hey charlie.
470 points, ended February 20, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very good. One suggestion though, read the crap out of what you write that way you can make improvements. It'll help a lot. Now despite the fact that it was all over the place, I thought it rocked. Thanks for entering.
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Its good dear just a little touching up here and there just because i see its in a contest. You want to give the competion heat so for those purposes only. It reminded me of high school days reading this it was more natural
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