I saw her one evening
Sitting way up there
In that tree.
Her face lined with tears.
I began to ponder,
Then called out to her.
“Hey darling, let’s go to the fair!
Just you and me.”
I held out my hand
And pulled her down from the tree.
Her beautiful face wet,
Yet, with a weak smile for me.
I didn’t care how she was dressed.
Neither did she.
What she wore,
Seemed perfect for the occasion.
I didn’t take her home,
She didn’t want to go.
He would be there waiting,
So off to the fair we go.
Golden caramel apples.
A rainbow of cotton candy.
All the soda one can drink,
Ah, the fair is in the air.
First to the coaster we went,
Where she got a laugh
On hearing my scream.
“Pie with cream?”
“Thanks for the bear!”
A bear that nearly cost me my hair!
A bear that now sits next to her face.
A face that seemed,
To have never known a tear.
My arm’s around her now,
As we sit up there in that big wheel.
Every light in the sky,
Shines as bright as can be.
She turns to me now
And looks me in the eye.
Her eyes so deep, so brown,
I don’t ever want to be found.
Then,
Not knowing how, don’t really care.
To us, time stood still,
The stars couldn’t compare.
What a kiss!
Now, there’s not a tear
On that pretty red face.
Just a smile,
I can’t take my eyes off of…
Author notes
i like this poem alot!
A contest entry
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Stellar write! The imagery and flow in this were greatly done and well described! The metaphor was also well done! It was a very compelling and overpowering piece! Good job and thanks for the entry!
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sweet
I enjoyed this poem. It told a wonderful story and for someone so young to capture such emotion...astounding... great work my dear. Keep writing you have the makings of a wondorous poet. -mandie-
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This one cheered me up. I love the story and experience portrayed here. Great job, poet!
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thanks for entering! this is such a cute poem! great emontion and description! you did a nice job, good luck in the contest!
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Congrats on the trophy! i really love it! You are an amazing poet! I'm going to have to watch your poetry. bravo.
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its a good poem I liked it, it was nicely written. I loved the rhythm.I luv it!
Keep on writing these amazing poems!
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I was prepared to like this a lot since you do.
I think you might like it a little better than I do
but it does tell an almost happy story. I don’t know
if I like how it leaves so much to my imagination
but some will. And it is cheerful. It’ll work.
Thank you for entering my contest.
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