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[ little girls in pink ]

little girls in pink
was it you long ago
clash of a hand
the breaking of the night stand
the pills that I ate
came a little bit to late
and the scars on my arm
are what any normal person does
the wax in my eye
or the stitches in my leg
about the voices in my head
after all the pinks in my head

A contest entry

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  • EmeraldDaze
    May 21, 2008
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    The colors make this very hard to read


  • j-ay rose
    February 28, 2008
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    "BIG gigantic rule number one!! i want your name in the authors box thank you very much."


  • Ryno
    February 23, 2008
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    Over 40 words Try again please


  • Luminescence
    February 12, 2008

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    very nice... it was short but got right to the point without all the axess BS. I really liked this. I'm getting awesome poems in this contest. Thank you so much for entering it and sharing your poem with us.

    ~Lumin


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 9, 2008
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    Great poem you have here, except one typo in the 6th line, should be "too"... Unfortunately this contest was for poems that had won silver in another, so I'm going to have to remove this entry. Good luck in the other contests you have this entered in.

    ♥
    whisper


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 7, 2008
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    Nice piece, like the ending. Good luck


  • tragicallyGifted
    February 6, 2008

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    I actually liked this a lot.

    Short, but desriptive enough to get.


    Great last line, and my favorite part.


    Good luck in the contest.

  • eatmydirt
    February 6, 2008
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    me going crazy

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