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Rose

ROSE  

Darkness

Crumbled by the silence

Lies a rose

It lies there as if sleeping

But never to wake

Dark

It's as if hide

But no one will ever find it

How can the world

Not see its pretty face?

When it's right in front of them

It's broken

Like a heart

That has been loved too many times 

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 12, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    IT is so hard to love and to lose whilst we try so hard. THe words in this are effective, the emotion is well done. I can feel as though there is no hope left..

    Welcome to the site, enjoy
    Faerie
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  • Perception
    February 6, 2008
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    Wonderful. Your words have so much power. It flows well, and has a great deeper meaning.

    But, I would suggest in the fourth line... If you just say "as if sleeping" because in the line before you already have said "Lies a rose"... I'm just saying it's kinda redundant.

    Anyways ~ Great job on this poem. ~ Wonderful write