I was spiruresd
wehn you aeksd me if you culod hvae a qiuet wrod
in the mdlide of the speurmrkeat
aimd the hesouhlod godos.
You siad you ddni't konw me aymrone,
taht we'd boceme stargenrs
gnoig auobt our levis, olivuoibs to the ohetr;
rbtiooc amoslt...
rimenetged and tmietlabed
dwon to the lsat mintue.
You sifhetd yuor wigeht form one foot to the ohter
as yuor hdans bshured troguhh yuor hiar.
I kenw waht you wneatd to say,
kenw as you lokeod aonurd
and aieodvd my qtsueoinnig eeys
taht it was oevr...
poor gril...
I wntead to oeffr smoe cfomrt but all I cuold say was:
"I'm srory, yuv'oe got me mexid up
wtih smeoone esle."
And wkal aawy.
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I was surprised
when you asked me if you could have a quiet word
in the middle of the supermarket
amid the household goods.
You said you didn't know me anymore,
that we'd become strangers
going about our lives, oblivious to the other;
robotic almost...
regimented and timetabled
down to the last minute.
You shifted your weight from one foot to the other
while your hand brushed through your hair.
I knew what you wanted to say,
knew as you looked around
and avoided my questioning eyes
that it was over...
poor girl...
I wanted to to offer some comfort but all I could say was:
"I'm sorry, you've got me mixed up
with someone else."
And walk away.
A contest entry
- IF YUO CNA RAED THSI WIRTE ME A PEOM by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
360 points, ended February 22, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This really is great. Its about getting mixed up with someone else and also the words mixed up together. I like that. well done..
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Puzzling through it was fun. I could actually read it with ease after the first few lines...
Nicely done.
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That's a really interesting poem. I like it. I will admit that I had a little difficulty with some of the words at the top screwed me up. It's just a great poem. I think you did an amazing job with it and though I'm partial to rhyming poems this one was great and told a very good story. I guess I should stop repeating myself now. Well, great job. Keep writing.
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RENELLE! (has a pretty little heart) says:
DAT'S YTTERP!
Sorry, this contact is temporarily insane, please hold the line... says:
yesh
RENELLE! (has a pretty little heart) says:
so pretty I felt the urge to be dyslexic for a couple of minutes
Lovelovelovelovelov it of course. <3
-Reni
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