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Hello

Hello
Chaotic sounds of silence
Breaking me down
Insanity ringing
All around
Hurting hatred
Murdering
Overflowing me
In my fake self-piety
Love of lies
And hello
Horrid goodbyes

Author notes

This is how things have been for me lately.

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  • Luminescence
    February 27, 2008
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    wow that sucks if that is how it has been for you lately... but be optimistic... you sure have made a hell of a poem out of it... I really did love it.

    My favourite part had to be where you talked about "in my fake self-piety" that was a WONDERFUL line...

    Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck,
    ~lumin

  • littledebbie
    February 12, 2008
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    Bravo

    Wow to be so young, you have a great talent.
    Keep it up I hope to read more of you.


  • awannabepoet
    February 12, 2008

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    Fatefull yet hopefull

    Let not your despair drag you beneath the surface of such a fragile sanity, for it is the greastest of thieves that saps our very essence.

    Let your soul rise above it all for you are the one true light, let it shine, oh and shine it shall for you have it within you to be reborn.

    Let not the darkness abode for the light is the only way, Rise, Rise above the ashes and be reborn my friend.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • laxrocks33
    February 11, 2008

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    Blunt and direct, with lots of emotive language. Despite the lack of concrete imagery, I liked the toppling structure of the poem, and the guttural nature of the thoughts.

  • OurxBeginning
    February 11, 2008

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    A very blunt piece. Filled with a lot of emotion for such a few words. I enjoyed this though, keep up the good work.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    That was really lovely and brutal

    at the same time. WE could hear the anguish in your
    soul as you wrote! Be bold dear poet, be bold, you
    keep writing it out finding that safe place for you
    to find peace and great strength in your heart.
    Then you can capture the peace once again.
    Remember...life always throws ..pooh..at us!
    It's how we respond that makes the difference! try to
    only take ownership of what has your name on it!
    much hugs to you.
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : ))

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