(dedicated to my wife, Kathy,)
Words cannot begin to express
the sorrow that I feel
towards the events
that have unfolded
of late…
It seems that life
has dealt us a bad hand,
my love,
and bluffing,
won’t make that hand,
any easier to win…
But just the same,
we must play it as it comes…
I know of late,
I’ve been tough to live with,
for I have my good days
and bad days...
And within those good and bad days,
good and bad moments…
My life changed this summer,
from one looking forward
for many years into the future,
a future with you…
It has changed since then,
to trying to find out,
what future,
I still have left…
There is so much,
I still want to do with you,
and I want to spend many years
doing these things with you…
The trouble is that now,
I don’t know,
if I have the time,
to do them…
All I do know is this,
the energy to do,
what I want to do
or
what I need to do
is not there, right now…
All I can do is try
to make the best
of each day,
as it comes…
If there is a best
to be found…
All I can ask you to do,
my love,
is this...
Please bear with me,
my love,
in the days, weeks, months,
and hopefully years
to come…
For it is only that hope
that sustains me…
© Jonathan Wikkins January 21, 2008
Revised February 6, 2008, February 9, 2008
All rights reserved
Author notes
I have revised this piece, even though it said much of what i wanted it to say, it it didn't say it all...
trouble is, with the comments made so far, they've been pretty much on the mark...
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Heartfelt
Moving thoughts that ask for love and understanding.
We all falter at times, and questions that remain within, unanswered.
May the love continue no matter the path you take in life.
Much love to you
Julie xx
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a very touching and heartfelt write, you've captured such strong emotion within your words, excellent write.
Rory
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First let me say I completely appreciate the sentiment and the emotion that went into this - you can tell this piece is truly personal and written with heart.
That said, to me, it does read a bit more like a letter than a piece of poetry. I am hearing you tell me these things but I do not see them for myself.
And I am not sure of the line placement - is it just done for aesthics? -
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thanks for your comment, yes, the line placement is for aesthetics... it's one of my trademarks, if you have a chance, it's in most of my left aligned pieces... not all, but, most...
it's a piece that does speak to someone very special to me, my wife, in ways i cannot express in spoken words
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This is such a special write, and I am honoured that you entered it. I am a bit emotional, and knowing what you are going through, makes it a little difficult to comment on as I would right now. God bless you and keep you. Frans
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congradulations.
This piece won you a green trophy jpg. to proudly display on your profile. Good job and happy writing. -
Congradulations.
Your poem has been chosen as a preliminary finalist and will recieve applause from me before I decide on the winners. Each poem also gets an additional comment that illustrates why it was chosen as a preliminary finalist.
The sincerety in this piece is the main factor that cused me to choose it. The sincerety and honesty in your words and feelings is the most prominent feature of this. There is a straight-forward realness to the way you put the words together as well. The stanza structure and the word choice and order give the reader the impression of weariness and exaustion, both emotional and physical.
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Every relationship has its crap times and sometimes its even harder when we know we are a cause of that, as we are unsure of how to be or what to do. If someone loves you though, they will listen to your plea and wait and be patient. Very heartfelt poem, hope you gave it to her to read, help her to understand...
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So sad and the emotion comes through from the first word to the last.
It's really basically undescribable; anything said would do it no justice.
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awesome
i read this piece twice. Something about it reminds me of a letter written to someone you have to say something to. like when everything you have to say can't be said aloud so the only way to get the message out is in writing. It's beautiful, heartfelt, and sad. Sadness is beautiful; it means that you care. good luck in the contest and thankyou for entering. -
i like the sense of unknowing yet also wisdom that you have about you in the poem. it is very sad, but it is nice how you do not sound too unbelievably emotional in it. it still brings out that emotion in the reader. i dont like "of late" in the first stanza. it sounds kind of awkward. a few little things like that, but otherwise written well. thanks for the entry and i hope your family is okay.
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Thats so sad, but yet kinda hopeful. But still so sad.
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Well the photo on this poem is a very nice touch. Also, the black and white background make this poem easy to read.
The poem itself is well written and sad. It gives us a glimpse into a life filled with doubt and regret (at least in the present.)
My favorite passage was:
"All I can do is try
to make the best
of each day,
as it comes…
If there is a best
to be found…"
This is sound advice that we should all live by.
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filled with so much emotion, since the first one of your poems i have read you have been in my prayers every day and you will be there i feel your pain along with the pain of what has happened to my family.
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restrained yet heartfelt, very touching, very well written. may you find the strength to bear what life sends you.
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I don't know what the situation is behind the words, but even so, it's a beautiful piece. I will keep you and your loved one in my prayers.
Blessed be
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very good write , sorry that it is so full pain and dispare. i will pray that the gods will give you what you want.
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good
This is a beautiful poem that is so innocent in its statement and delivery that it calms the heart. Your words are simple, yet so strong and layered with emotion. The words are simplicity themselves but in context they speak volumes on the mind frame, hopes, admissions and future of the author. A heart felt sad poem that describes the pain of lost love and the willingness of true love to experience that pain in order to feel loved.
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Impassioned expression. The world needs as many people like you as it can possibly keep hold of. Keep loving, keep writing, keep fighting.
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I recall the original, this is very emotional, seems to tell more of the tale in the words, both versions quite good. Prayer changes things, those who love you will join hands and minds and hearts around you even if at times you are too weak to raise your eyes. God Bless.
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This Poem Is So Full Of Emotion. When I read It I actually Felt Like Crying. I'm Not Sure What Bad Situation you Are experiencing but I Hope Everything Goes Well. I can tell you are really Full of Love For Your wife And I hope you Have time to Finish All The things you want to finish.
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My gosh, what a heartfelt poem! I feel for both you and your wife, I really do. Sounds like life hasnt been easy. I hope that your dreams and hopes become reality, and I also pray that you and your wife have many many many years to come, to share together. This poem is an amazing write! Keep up the great work. & Chin up!
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My heart goes out to you Mike. I pray you can indeed find your strength wrapped inside the love you and your wife share.
The future is highly overrated but so very much a goal we all have in life. The only thing that matters is each day as they come...as many or as few as we may have. Its up to us to find the glimmer of happiness in each of them, to embrace each sunrise. None of us knows what page number our book ends on, but we can read each page with enthusiasm. After all...any other choice makes no real sense...does it?
Sending you healing warmth from Arizona...
and love from my heart...
Mary Ann
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hey...
we need all the help we can get...
and healing...
the docs gave me a year with chemo, and 6 months without... so i chose chemo... things are better for me now, things have shrunken quite a bit...
but, the side effects...
keep me in your thoughts and prayers...
mike
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a very expressive piece, very personal and vulnerable...hope is all that sustains me too, so I know the feeling.
Good write here,
Creatress
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