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Dad



I'm sorry I made you get mad,

please just don't take it out on Mum, Dad.

She's been good all the way through,

what did she ever do to you?

Dinner was only five minutes late,

so there is no reason to spit out hate.

The bath she ran was a little hot,

but she didn't deserve what she got!

When she's back later than eight,

you get monstrous and quite irate.

She'd never cheat on you Dad,

so don't hit her and make her sad.

It's not her fault you forgot the trash,

or that she's a little low on cash.

It's not her fault when my sister's in tears,

it's actually you Dad, you make her fear.

I know what you do Dad to her too,

how could you Dad, I say how could you?

I wont pipe up, I'm only twelve,

I can't deal with you all by myself.

But when I'm older I'll hurt you back,

for doing such unclean and violent acts.

I'm not your son, I'll never be like you!

I'll do anything to make sure of that too.

Dad I'd be careful, I'd stay away,

you have marked your death bed today.

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not about me, about...well, situations I've known about.

x Empathic Rose x

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  • Luminescence
    March 18, 2008

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    Wow.... this is wonderful. lol welcome to the next round... this is a perfect 40... wonderfull
    ~lumin


  • Decorus Somnium
    February 9, 2008

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    Stunning! Such a gorgeous write my darling. I love it! You wrote it like it was for real...great, great job. Congratulations on the trophy!!
    Keep writing


  • Sorath
    February 9, 2008

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    Arghh it's people like you that make me have to do more places. I hope your happy lol. Thanks for the entry!


  • everthesame
    February 8, 2008

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    Really? This was kinda upsetting to read but it was very powerful great write I'm glad to hear that it sint about you though but not to happy that you know what this situations feel or are like great piece though you've amazing talent keep it up


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 6, 2008

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    i am confused about the first stanza, did you mean to put just take it out on mum, or not to, but other then that this is a strong poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

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