You can see me burning
In this city on a hill.
Everyone can see it but they love their fear.
And you are the only one
Who sees but doesn't understand;
I've wanted this. I put myself here.
The vision of my paleness
Charring into ash
Is more of a hell than you've ever known.
And, God, I'M SO SORRY
I didn't want your pain,
But this is the path that I have sown.
I tried to make you understand
But you couldn't see past my fire
You're the only one who dared to stand
It's a shame you did it all for a liar
I want to be alone
I want to see alone
I want to work, breathe, think, and shift alone
I want to learn alone
I want to yearn alone
I want to sream, dive, fight, and live alone . . .
But I don't want to die alone.
I know it hurts
I know it's my fault
The fire has nearly died
Can you forgive it all?
Author notes
For anyone who doesn't know, the original 'city on a hill' represented a new religion in new America. They were a 'city on a hill' in that everyone could see them all around, and were an example.
I thought I'd add this so that it's a little clearer to the contest holder; the poem is not about my physical brother, but I was raised with him and I knew him from birth.
A contest entry
- Rhyme Time (Inspire Me) by WarmHeartedGeisha.
360 points, ended March 1, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Brotherly/Sisterly Love by Crazy9Piano8Freak.
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I love how it's related to God. He is always there for you - and so you won't die alone. No matter what you do, whether he likes what you're doing or not, He will still love you - that is my philosophy so try to remember it. This is filled with lots of meaning and emotion. I love it! Great job! Thank you and good luck!
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I'm surprised you came to that conclusion; most people think it's about people or they just don't get it. This is very insightful of you. Thank you.
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this is a really good write, it's a different take on the prompt, but it works really well, best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for wishing me luck.
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Interesting, but I don't quite get it.
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That's ok. I mostly wrote this for myself . . . I'm not entirely sure why I posted it
Well, thanks for reading, anyway.
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you know this inspired me, thanks for the muse, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I'm glad it was good for something^.^
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i like it
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Articulately said
Don't worry, I don't like it either
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