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Sometimes



My heart beats

At a constant rate.

I can hear it
And feel it.




Sometimes I wish I couldn't.


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  • just-an-amateur
    February 10, 2008

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    Don't we all? It feels as if our heart will give us away with its constant racket. You struck a chord here but I hope that you don't really want your heart to stop. I know this world would be worse off without you. Trust that little organ because as it keeps pumping all day every day it's doing the right thing.
    But now, back to your 25 words of sheer amazement. Well I think that said it all. Your clear use of imagery captured my attention. Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest!
    ~M~


  • checkmate
    February 6, 2008

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    short and poignant. the last line is like a punch, a slap...and it hurt reading this as a reader. hope thisi\ is not personal dear

    very best lucks in the contest

    love,
    char