Look into her eyes.
There is so much to be said.
Feelings of loneliness and wishing she were dead.
Her eyes speak words that her voice can not express.
Thoughts of depression and emptiness in her chest.
Her eyes are the windows to the deepest parts of her soul.
They can not camouflage the pain that has taken a toll.
They're not tinted glass or a one way mirror.
Look beyond the reflection and you can see her terror.
Look into her eyes and you can see what they show.
A lost and confused girl with no-wheres to go.
Look into her eyes and tell me what you see.
Because that lost and confused girl is no other than me.
Author notes
I wrote this poem in the girls perspective....let's all take a look into her eyes and maybe we can help her through....She is our daughter, sister, niece, grandchild, friend.....She is even a stranger but still longs for us to look into her eyes.
"ForeverLastingComa
In a list
A contest entry
- I'm in the mood for ANYTHING! by ForeverLastingComa.
550 points, ended April 25, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes....the second time... by Nikki Rowles.
600 points, ended June 13, 2008, 73 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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well Empathic Rose and Forever Lasting Coma pretty much said it all but yeah...I get it some poeple are just so blind...when we're good they close their eyes so taht when we're bad we'll scar their minds...sorry manson moment thank you for entering...
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i agree with the person below me this piece has a lot of feelings and emotion in it..i felt every single line of this poem..i feel the same way..i loved this poem because its something i can relate to..sometimes a smile can fool all can't it, right?..heh i guess thats how things are sometimes..great write i enjoyed reading every line of it..good luck in my contest =)
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A lot of feeling and emotion comes into this piece. I can recognise your style and your mood in this piece all too well
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I really enjoyed this poem. It's very heart felt and personal. Great write.
Alyssa*Rose*
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Love this poem! More people should pay attention to girls and their feelings and what really is going on behind their shielded facades. Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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This is a wonderful poem and your note should hit home with more than a few. Your words are so true. Sometimes all it takes is a kind word or a hug to make all the difference in the world.
Love, Cathy.
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Wow! Pappacass, you are starting to amaze me! What an excellent write and take you have on the pic. An inaginative write of inspiration. Well Done!
alby
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WOW!!! You amazed me here......You are so correct! We should all take the moment to look in those eyes and offer help if we can! Looks like you have already touched a few souls here...Well done Shawn!
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Woa
this is about me...not literally intended for me, but it explains me, if you look into my eyes, you find the exact same thing, as that girl in the picture. Great write...I enjoyed it!
Look into her eyes
there is so much to be said
feelings of lonlieness and wishing she were dead...
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That's me, oh my God that's me to T, this is so how I feel...and to see it put poetically brought me to tears. Wow, I know how this girl feels...great job Uncle Shawn! I love you with all my heart! 
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wow you done a good job writing from a girls prospective. I really liked the way you used emotion and made an intence feeling with you words. It's a really good poem and I really really like it. You should have entered ths into my contest that was closed Monday... it's really good.
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awwww this poem is really good but it made me feel all sad, I dont care its still good
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Not bad, ever think of using multible syllable words though?
until immolation,
Grimoire
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