Sticks and stones
Broken limbs
Shattered bones
Crowding around
My body fails
Knees to ground
Hands to hold
Down at my side
No manner of beast pretends
Not to feel pain
But I am man
And my battered body admits no agony
I am
Wounds weeping red tears
I am not afraid
No vehicle of violence pretends
They only reach at me with empty hands.
Each fist
Bat
Rock
Chain
Club
Boot
They reach and grab
Screaming at me with each blow
Greedy villains reaching for my love
Empty hands
Crowded circle retreats
I am alone in my bloody clearing
Dark hearts surround
She wipes red from my eye
Gentle love
Precious eyes
You smile and I breathe
Your fingertips are bloody
Why are you here?
The crowd mumbles in some semblance of wicked hope
You lean close and whisper in my ear
"I don't love you."
They begin to yell
Wanting to begin again
She stands tall and smiles
"No need."
They walk away
Tears
paths across my cheeks through the blood
A hollow heart in empty hands
Author notes
Option 1
D.emington
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Comments
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NICE I LOVE IT Read mine cry of chrysta
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fight club...
it's all in the mind... what a beautiful way to be defeated.
The body can handle the torture... the question is.. can the mind?
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very cool
it was a very excellent poem. most of the poems i have read on this site from people aren't very good anymore so i was really impressed. good job!
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liked it
I love fast paced poems and this is no exception. what i liked about it was that it was fast paced enough that i didn't feel like i was trying to pass time, very well constructed and presented.
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This is a well written poem......I loved the imaginary used in it.......
Why are you here?
The crowd mumbles in some semblance of wicked hope
You lean close and whisper in my ear
"I don't love you."
So powerful are theses four lines.......
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wow... powerful words!!
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wow what this poor fella went through just to hear those awful words.... "I don't love you." Such a cruel thing to say to someone who was willing to go through so much to get your attention. This is a very creative and imaginative write. Great job here.
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This is really good, there were a few lines that really stood out.
I really liked "wounds weeping red tears", great imagery.
They begin to yell
Wanting to begin again
She stands tall and smiles
"No need."
I think this was my favorite part, it was simple but profound at the same time.
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amazing!! great write and I loved it!! good luck in contest.
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Powerful stuff. What can I say that has not been said. the last stanza is very powerful, the hollowness is felt by the reader too. Phew...well freaking done.
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This is great. It deserved to be in the Spotlight. Well done I look forward to reading more!!
Keep up the great writing Demington
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yo yo man!
what a poem you are trying to keep me glued to the screen. you can think. -
Wow, the ultimate betrayal and loss. I cannot even begin to imagine what this could be like. . .
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I've just want to finally come clean and admit that everytime I see this comment I watch the smiley face fight darth vader...a few minutes of bliss...
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You lean close and whisper in my ear
"I don't love you." - that bit really did it for me. The poem definitely needed it, it was all gory and creepy up until that point. But I know this too well, the bats and the rock and the chains and, more than anything, the boot.
Thanks for sharing
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awesome =]
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Very cleverly done. The pace is just great with the blows felt as each is said aloud. Liked the twist in the middle and then again at the end; it holds the interest. Bravo! Another great write from you!
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Very smartly written the imagery
just captures us and pulls us right in..we can't wait
to read the next line and see where you are taking us!
Very well written, and cleverly done!
good job poet!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle.
I thought it was clever you started it with a twisting
rhyme!
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What a beautiful and heart wrenching poem. It goes from hopeless desperation to just hopeless despair. Very nice. Good luck in the contest
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Oh... speechless here, in admiration for the power and depth of this magnificent poem.
BRAVO! 
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